Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern era, Thesedays many popular people are photographed by professional photographers at there any travel trip and some people think that it good thing and others think that it is not good to follow the famous persons by the photographers. However, there are both types of view will be discused in the forth coming paragraphs.

To commence with, there are some good ideas of this trend. The first and the foremost method is that, when the popular people are photographed by excel photographers, then they can show their high class to other people and it Also, they can want to their pictires becomes good, So it is memorable think for their family and it is only possible, when they give to a lot of money to the excel photographers for their expensive and classic photoshoot to show the public and on the social media platforms.

Nevertheless, there are some adverse effect of this phenomenon. Firstly, if people spend a more money on their expensive photographes, then they can waste their money. Apart from this, it is not a good thing to show their family privacy by post their photoes on the social media as well as it is a big reason of the photographers charge the higher amount of money to take some pictures and the middle class society do not aford that amount of photographrs on their occassion like Wedding, Parties.

In conclusion, although there are both points of view is correct on their place, but my own opinion is that, it is not good for public, due to aforementioned paragraphs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The candidate addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—the public interest in famous people being photographed and the intrusion of privacy—while also providing an opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing. For instance, the argument in the second paragraph regarding celebrities showing 'their high class' and paying photographers for classic photoshoots is unclear and wanders slightly off track. The position is discernible at the end, but the reasoning lacks sufficient depth and clarity to reach higher bands. Therefore, this performance fits comfortably within Band 5, as it addresses the task partially with limited and under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, featuring a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward referencing and mechanical cohesive devices, such as 'To commence with' and 'The first and the foremost method is that'. Pronoun referencing is often confusing, as seen in phrases like 'it Also, they can want to their pictires becomes good'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak due to run-on sentences and a lack of clear logical links between sentences. These issues place the response at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0, because while there is an organizational structure, progression is lacking and cohesion is frequently inaccurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader. Examples of inaccurate lexical choices include 'Thesedays', 'pictires', 'memorable think', 'photographes', 'photoes', 'aford', and 'photographrs'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and minimally adequate for the task. Less common lexical items are attempted but result in noticeable errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'excel photographers' instead of 'excellent or professional photographers'. Because the errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted vocabulary range, the response aligns with Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by a heavy reliance on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty, producing convoluted and ungrammatical clauses, such as 'there are both types of view will be discused' and 'if people spend a more money on their expensive photographes, then they can waste their money.' Punctuation is also problematic, with long, run-on sentences containing multiple clauses joined incorrectly by commas and conjunctions. Frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and prepositions cause considerable difficulty for the reader. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 4.

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