Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people believe that it is a good idea for celebrities to be captured by a professional photographers every where they go, while others argue that is not a good idea for photographers to follow famous people. in this discussion, i will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
On one hand, it is a good thing for celebrities to ensure professional photographers follow them to any events, because this will enable them to capture neat and beautiful photographs. it will strenghten their social lifestyles by providing beautiful and elegant pictures rather than dull pictures from any unprofessional person. Furthermore, famous people attend a very high class events, dressed elegantly and classy and they will want to post on their social media platforms for their fans. Hiring a professional for pictures will result in good outcome of the pictures or videos they intend to post. For instance, when a celebrity is invited to a ceremoney like premieres, fashion shows and all other events. They will want to dress elegant and take a good photographs in which this can only be achieve by a professional. Therefore, getting a well experienced photographers will ehance beautiful and elegant pictures.
On the other hand, some believe they hire photographer in other to show off or just to feel among. Photographers might not be necessary in some ocassions. they also believe it is a waste of money because they will need to pay them at the end of their service. For example, when a photographer follow a famous person, it will leads to increase in cost and might lead to financial burden. Following them might not be necessary.
In conclusion, photographers following famous people have both positive and negative impacts. However this depend on individual paspectives.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—the benefits of professional photographers capturing celebrities and the arguments against this practice—while also providing a concluding stance. The position is clear throughout, and the ideas are extended, particularly in the second paragraph regarding social media and high-class events. However, the development in the counter-argument paragraph is somewhat limited and misinterprets the prompt slightly by framing the debate around celebrities hiring photographers rather than paparazzi or professional photographers following them without direct invitation. For instance, the student states 'some believe they hire photographer in other to show off', which diverges slightly from the core prompt about photographers following famous people everywhere. Despite this minor misdirection in one body paragraph, the task is addressed adequately overall, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptors where relevant ideas are presented and a position is maintained.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs representing opposing views, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion', which help structure the essay. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For instance, the transition 'this can only be achieve by a professional' lacks smooth integration, and there are mechanical errors in punctuation and referencing throughout. Additionally, the progression of ideas in the third paragraph feels a bit abrupt and repetitive, with phrases like 'Following them might not be necessary' echoing previous points. These limitations place the essay securely in Band 6, where organization is generally clear despite mechanical cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'professional photographers', 'social media platforms', and 'financial burden'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text. Examples include lowercase letters for pronouns and sentence beginnings ('in this discussion, i will discuss', 'it will strenghten'), grammatical slips like 'achieve' instead of 'achieved', 'ceremoney' instead of 'ceremony', 'ehance' instead of 'enhance', and 'ocassions' instead of 'occasions'. Furthermore, the phrase 'feel among' is an inappropriate collocation in standard English. These inaccuracies do not severely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to a solid Band 5.5, reflecting an adequate range with frequent lexical and spelling slips.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting complex structures with subordinate clauses like 'because this will enable them to capture neat and beautiful photographs' and 'when a celebrity is invited to a ceremoney'. However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent errors, including missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for the pronoun 'I', subject-verb agreement issues ('this depend on individual paspectives'), and incorrect verb forms ('can only be achieve'). Punctuation is also neglected, notably with run-on ideas and sentence fragments in the second body paragraph ('For instance, when a celebrity is invited to a ceremoney like premieres, fashion shows and all other events. They will want to dress elegant...'). These frequent errors can occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score at Band 5.0.
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