Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In a present scnerio, well-known people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. several people say this is a benificial thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people belived that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. This eassy will discuss both views and give my own opinion in uppcoming paragraph.
On the one hand, some people think this is a benificial thing because the public are interested in their lives. Although, public does not know which types of diesgeding dhrees they wear, if they see the celebritish picture on social meadia peopel know what types of clothes they wear. so its a benificial for those peopel who dont know how to live proffesinal life style.
On the other hand, I strongly agree with this view just, becasue of privacy all peoples have their own life and lives with their own choice. privacy playes a vital role in each and every indivicial's life. For example, some photographers cleck the pictuers without thier permission. some famous people does not like if someone cleck their private life photoes.
In conclution, Althrouht, In this topic there are some benifites, some of time its deteremantel for both. In my point of veiw professional photographers should take permisson to famous people. if they are agree than you take photos. this are change all over worlds life style.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding celebrity photography and provides a personal opinion. However, the ideas are relatively basic and lack full development. For instance, the argument in the second paragraph about learning professional lifestyles from celebrity clothing is somewhat tangential and unclear. Furthermore, the response falls short of the minimum word count requirement, containing only 226 words instead of the required 250 words, which has a negative impact on the overall task achievement score. A clearer structure and more thorough elaboration of ideas are needed to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, following a standard introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion layout. However, logical progression is hindered by frequent structural and cohesive issues. Transitional phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' are used, but sentences within paragraphs often lack smooth logical links. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing does not always reflect a cohesive flow of distinct arguments. For example, the conclusion introduces a new conditional structure rather than effectively summarising the main points.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'scnerio' for scenario, 'benificial' for beneficial, 'belived' for believed, 'eassy' for essay, 'celebritish' for celebrity, 'diesgeding' for designing, 'peopel' for people, 'cleck' for click, 'pictuers' for pictures, 'conclution' for conclusion, 'Althrouht' for although, 'deteremantel' for detrimental, 'veiw' for view, 'permisson' for permission). These lexical inaccuracies and persistent spelling mistakes noticeably strain the reader and restrict the score to the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently marred by errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage (e.g., 'all peoples have their own life and lives with their own choice', 'privacy playes a vital role', 'some famous people does not like'). Punctuation is also erratic, with frequent lowercase letters at the start of sentences and misplaced commas. These persistent errors frequently impede communication and require effort from the reader to interpret the intended meaning.
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