Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

whenever visitors visit at wonderfull places they click their photos by some experienced photographers. however few individuals argue that it is better way to remember that memories. And some people belive that it is too bad to adopt photography likely famous artist. I agree with both of viewpoint because both are correct according to people lifestyle.

On the one hand, most of peole click photos by photographer who already experinced during travelling or visting some extra-ordinary places. While people go at wonderfull area they always want to save of thier view as a memory, therefore nowadays it would be possible to capture that moment. When i went to the Mathura temple their i saw enormus fascinating things of natural view, Then also i captured plenty of pictures by my personal with the help of my freind. In present day, It makes trend to show off our daily life on the social meadia applications.

On the other hand, Some person claimed that who takes photos they are follow wrong way. They can never click good photos rather than celebreties. A good photo in a good manner may be famous in future.

So always take a good shot with the good pose, if you have made a famous person. And one more things, a good photographer and a camera both are neccesary to doing famous person.

As far as i am concerned that both of viewpoint might be correct. It's totaly depend on thier situation, that what types view availble thier and what type of the lifestyle theor follow people.

In conclusion, Some people have dream to make a famous person on social meadia. Hence they follow a good routine which helps to make attractive look front of camera. However most of people use social meadia and it is also a trend especially in India.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the prompt regarding the paparazzi and famous people, but misinterprets the core theme slightly, confusing famous public figures being followed by professional photographers with everyday tourists having their photos taken at scenic spots. This misunderstanding stems from the opening sentence: 'whenever visitors visit at wonderfull places they click their photos by some experienced photographers.' Despite this misinterpretation, the writer does attempt to discuss both views and gives an opinion. However, the ideas are underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack clear support relevant to the actual task question. Therefore, this performance aligns closely with Band 4.0 descriptors, where the response addresses the task only partially and tangentially due to confusion over the central topic.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, information and ideas are not arranged coherently due to severe logical lapses and the misinterpretation of the prompt. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand,' but they fail to connect well-developed arguments. Referencing is often unclear, as seen in sentences like 'if you have made a famous person.' Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features match the Band 4 descriptors, where the progression of ideas is difficult to follow and organizational flaws are prominent throughout the essay.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily strained. The student relies on simple terms and makes frequent word-choice errors, such as using 'wonderfull' instead of wonderful, 'belive' instead of believe, and 'thier' instead of their. Phrases like 'doing famous person' and 'make a famous person' are unnatural and impede communication. There is little evidence of less common lexical items used accurately, and spelling errors are numerous ('experinced', 'enormus', 'fascinating', 'celebreties', 'neccesary'). This performance fits the Band 4 descriptor, where basic and repetitive vocabulary and frequent errors significantly strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The writing exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty and ungrammatical, such as in the sentence 'When i went to the Mathura temple their i saw enormus fascinating things of natural view, Then also i captured plenty of pictures by my personal with the help of my freind.' Errors in tense, word order, articles, and prepositions are pervasive throughout the text. These errors frequently distort meaning and make the sentences difficult to parse. Consequently, this warrants a Band 4.0 score, reflecting a very limited grammatical range and frequent errors that hinder comprehension.

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