Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people believe this is a good wayfor influenced the public. Other people believe through pictures is a wrong way to follow famous people.

On the one hand, some people think that public are interested in celebrities or influencers lives. Therefore they take photographs by professionals. Some celebrities such as Virat Kohli is a famous cricketer. But now as he promotes any ad, people capure photos and videos of them. Because an ordinary people who attract by them. For instance Deepika Padukone doing advertisement for any brand Nike Shoes. People start to buy that shoes. Because they develop an interest.

On the other hand, some people believe that capture photos of famous people are wrong way to follow them. Because they have their own personal space and family. They also need to spend time with their family. Sometime a celebrity or any enterprenuer does not like to visualise their personal life on media. As a result it helps them to relaxed and comfortable. For example many famous actors such as Gigi Hadid. She does not reveal her daughter"s faceoto social media. Even they put stories on the instagram when someone trying to capture their daughter son moments.

In conclusion, I believe we should not follow celebrities by taking photographs. Because they also have their own life. Also they need to work on focus and goals. I think if some celebrity arrives suddenly. We can capture photo or vidoe but with consent. Without consent it is illegal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on paparazzi and celebrity photography, and concludes with a clear personal opinion. The ideas presented, such as the public interest in celebrities and the importance of personal space, are relevant but remain somewhat under-developed due to limited elaboration and disjointed phrasing. For instance, the discussion regarding brand endorsements by Virat Kohli and Deepika Padukone attempts to support the positive view, but the connection between brand promotion and constant professional photography is muddled. Similarly, the points regarding family and consent touch upon valid arguments for the negative view, but lack cohesive explanation. The position is clear throughout, but the development of ideas aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors, as the response is restricted by repetitive points and limited expansion of thoughts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, demonstrating an attempt at structured organisation with introductory and concluding remarks, as well as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' transition markers. However, the overall progression is heavily disrupted by poor referencing, erratic sentence boundaries, and mechanical or missing cohesive devices. For example, sentences often start abruptly, such as 'Because an ordinary people who attract by them' and 'Without consent it is illegal', which impairs logical flow. Pronoun referencing is also frequently unclear, as seen in 'Even they put stories on the instagram when someone trying to capture their daughter son moments.' Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak, placing this performance firmly in Band 4.5 to 5.0; a score of 5.0 is awarded as there is a discernible overall arrangement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource displayed is limited and minimally adequate. The writer attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'influencers', 'enterprenuer', and 'consent', but frequent word choice and collocation errors impede clarity throughout. Examples of awkward phrasing include 'wayfor influenced the public', 'capure photos', and 'visualise their personal life on media'. There are also spelling errors like 'enterprenuer' and punctuation/formatting slips such as 'daughter"s faceoto'. While the vocabulary covers the topic of media and celebrities, the errors and lack of precision restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentences alongside frequent, highly faulty attempts at complex structures. There is a persistent lack of basic grammatical control, including missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb forms, and severe fragment sentences. Examples of serious errors include 'famous people are photographed' (which is acceptable, but followed by) 'Some people believe this is a good wayfor influenced the public', 'Because an ordinary people who attract by them', and 'capturing photos of famous people are wrong way'. Subject-verb agreement errors, tense inconsistencies, and structural fragmentation occur in almost every sentence. Because errors are frequent, systematic, and frequently cause difficulty for the reader, the grammar performance aligns with a Band 4.0.

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