Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's modern world, the issue of professional photographer has become a matter of considerable debate.

Some people believe that professional photographer are doing good to follow the famous personalities to keep us update with all upcoming fashion their life style, while other argue that professional photographers should not follow them to give them public attention. this essay will discuss both perspectives before explaining why i believe that. Just see professional photographers have only skill they can click good pictures and then they can earn some thing they are just doing their jobs and feeding their families.

On the one hand, supporters of professional photographers always appreciate them to keep doing good work because in our country there is a famous singer name is Atif Aslam i love to follow his fashion and style the only way i can see him on internet thought professional photographers clicked pictures. Also professional photographers show the real face of celebrities

On the other hand, proponents of professional photographers thing they should follow then everywhere. Because other people thing what they are showing on the screen it's totally fake and when lower middle class peoples saw then and think about them they got depressed due to their low incomes and they cannot afford the expensive clothes and other fashions that's why other hand people don't appreciate the professional photographers to follow them.

In conclusion, although people want to keep update there fashion sense throughout the pictures of professional photographers, on other side people do not want to waste there time and money to see the non sense content by professional photographers also has considerable merit. however, i believe that professional photographers are doing great job for common people and famous people have lots of hard work then they achieve their destine so it's their right to appreciate them to click the good photos.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task partially, presenting both views regarding professional photographers following famous people, along with a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. For instance, the writer introduces the perspective that seeing celebrities can cause depression among lower-income groups, but this point is not fully explained or integrated smoothly. The position is stated, but the arguments remain somewhat superficial and lack sufficient supporting examples from general knowledge or experience. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to extend each main idea more thoroughly, ensuring that arguments for both sides and the personal stance are well-supported and clearly articulated throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation evident in the essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing different views, and a conclusion. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs is occasionally disrupted. Cohesive devices are sometimes inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as repetitive transitions like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand,' which are misapplied when discussing similar or repetitive points rather than true contrasting views. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Improved referencing and a wider, more accurate range of cohesive tools would enhance the overall structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used represents a limited but minimally adequate range for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'considerable debate' and 'perspectives,' but there are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form, such as 'professional photographer' instead of photographers, 'keep us update' instead of updated, and 'non sense content.' Spelling errors also occur, such as 'thought' instead of through and 'there' instead of their. These lexical inaccuracies and limitations sometimes cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher level. Expanding word families and paying closer attention to collocations and accurate word forms will significantly strengthen this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with occasional attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'lower middle class peoples saw then'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and poor punctuation control, such as run-on sentences and lowercase letters at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'this essay will discuss'). These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning. To improve, the writer should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct punctuation, and reducing errors in verb forms and agreements.

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