Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, Photography is very famous among people. People want capture everything for good memories for future. Some Individuals think that professional photographers are took photos of famous people in everywhere because they intersted in their lives on the other side people think that it is not good to follow famous people everywhere they go. I agree with the second point of view. I will discuss both views in upcoming paragraphs.

In the first point of view, Individuals think that professional photographers take pictures of famous people because they are interested in their lives. According to me, it is good for that people who like famous people. when photographers upload photos of celebrities on the social media then all people can get deep knowledge regarding celebrities's favorate things like food, clothes, place and many more things. For example, shah rukh khan is a very famous hero.Most people like him. They want to know about everything related to him. So, they can get any information related to him by professional photographers.

On the other side, People think that it is wrong to follow famous people because due to it celebrities feel okward. they cannot live privacy life.professional photographers follow to them everywhere they go and upload everything related to them on social media. They want privacy from social media. Sometimes, they want spend time with thier family alone but they cannot do this becuase photographers follow to them everywhere and capture their photos for their profession and get views from public. some people give positive view and some give negative. people judge to their life. So, they should not do it.

Conclusion, As a my point of view, Second view is good becuase famous people should have privacy. They have right to live their life alone without camera and spend some time with their family members and friends. so, professional photographers should not follow to celebrities everywhere they go.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on paparazzi and giving your personal opinion throughout the essay. Your position is clear from the introduction and is maintained until the conclusion. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat uneven. While you present relevant points such as public interest and celebrities' right to privacy, some of these ideas are under-developed or rely on repetitive reasoning. For instance, the discussion on social media and privacy is repeated across multiple paragraphs rather than being extended with deeper analysis or varied supporting examples. To move to a higher level, you should ensure that every main point is fully elaborated with robust, distinct arguments and comprehensive explanations rather than brief, generalized statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

Your essay has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing each view, and a concluding paragraph. You use standard cohesive markers to structure your writing, such as 'In the first point of view', 'On the other side', and 'Conclusion'. However, the progression of ideas can sometimes feel mechanical due to repetitive transitional phrasing and occasional faulty referencing. For example, phrases like 'According to me' and 'As a my point of view' disrupt the natural flow of academic argumentation. Additionally, paragraphing is used, but the internal logical links between sentences need smoother transitions. To achieve a stronger flow, you should integrate a wider variety of cohesive devices more flexibly and ensure that referencing pronouns point back clearly to their intended antecedents.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using common terms related to celebrities, privacy, and public interest like 'professional photographers', 'celebrities', 'social media', and 'family members'. You also attempt some less common vocabulary, but this is accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as writing 'intersted' instead of 'interested', 'favorate' instead of 'favorite', and 'live privacy life' instead of 'lead a private life'. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict your score. To improve your lexical performance, focus on expanding your control of less common lexical items, ensuring correct word forms, and refining your spelling and collocations so your writing appears more polished and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms throughout your essay, attempting structures such as conditional and subordinate clauses. However, your grammatical accuracy is limited by frequent errors, particularly with verb forms, prepositions, articles, and sentence boundaries. Examples include 'photographers are took photos', 'that people who like', 'follow to them', and 'They have right'. These errors in basic and complex structures require some effort from the reader to decode, though they rarely obscure your core meaning entirely. To elevate your grammatical range and accuracy, you need to exercise greater control over tense consistency, active and passive verb formations, and prepositional usage, aiming for a higher proportion of error-free sentences.

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