Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In todays world, the influential individuals shoot by expert camera mens all over the crowded places, most of the people think that it is great thing because public show interest in their daily activities. Well other group of people reject this notion that photographers do bad to follow their routine. In modern era of technology where the social media had a great impact on common people it is ture that public want know more and more about successful Populace. Futher more i elaborate my stance on this statement which eventually leads toward a logical conclusion.

Fristlly, as i mentioned people want to know about influential individuals and photographer how followed them and post a social media post about them also have a great following. The main reason behind it people inspired by their famous actor, musician or politicians etc. When they saw their daily routines behind the scenes reality they fell a sense of belonging and connected with them.

On the other hand, their is sufficient group of people taught that this is not good trend to capture the pictures and post it without having their consent. Which is also unquestionably correct because everyone have the right of privacy in their lives. Some people create memes and troll them for no reason, famous people also deserve a normal life without any unnecessary stress from public.

In conclusion, i believe that capturing the influential people in good because people see the behind the camera picture of their stars and try to get motivated them self. But which disturbing their private life these camera man should try to have their consent what to post or not becasue this is basic right of everyone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both perspectives and give a personal view: the first body paragraph explains why audiences follow celebrities, while the second raises consent, privacy and online trolling. Your conclusion also makes your position clear: photography can be interesting, but photographers should respect privacy. These are relevant points, though some are not fully developed. For example, the claim that seeing stars’ routines motivates people would be stronger with a specific example or explanation of how this happens. The opposing view is also framed mainly around posting images without consent, rather than the broader issue of photographers following people everywhere. Develop each side more evenly and make the distinction between public interest and intrusive pursuit clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “On the other hand” help signal the change in perspective, and the conclusion returns to your own position. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear. The opening moves quickly from public interest to your stance, and “Futher more i elaborate my stance” does not clearly connect to the discussion that follows. Within paragraphs, ideas sometimes run together, as in the first body paragraph’s sequence about following, posting, inspiration and connection. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each explanation explicitly to the paragraph’s main point. More precise referencing would also help readers follow who “they” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “privacy,” “consent,” “behind the scenes,” and “sense of belonging,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, and spelling errors are noticeable. Phrases such as “influential individuals shoot by expert camera mens,” “photographers do bad,” and “capture the pictures” make parts of the argument difficult to understand. “Populace” is also an unsuitable choice for referring to famous people. Aim for accurate, natural combinations such as “celebrities are photographed by professional photographers” and “the public is interested in their lives.” Proofread spelling and choose familiar, precise vocabulary before attempting more formal or uncommon words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” The main ideas are generally recoverable, but errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and articles occur across the response. For example, “the influential individuals shoot by expert camera mens” lacks a correct passive construction, while “everyone have the right” has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening also joins several complete ideas with weak punctuation, and “But which disturbing their private life” is not a complete sentence. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and review agreement and article use.

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