Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Recently, there has been a trend among professional photographers to follow celebrities everywhere they go to capture their personal moments. Many people, especially the fans of these celebrities, say that this is a good practice because they can get regular updates about their favourite people. Others, especially the celebrities, would argue that this is wrong because it invades their privacy.

Nowadays, famous celebrities are photographed almost everywhere by professional photographers called "paparazzi". Their primary job is to follow famous people and give their fans updates about where they are going or what they are doing by posting these pictures or videos online. Their fans say that this is a wonderful thing because they are interested in their favourite person's not only professional, but also personal life. So this trend interests the fans and also the photographers because it's they make an earning from this. For example, a photographer takes pictures of a famous person when they travel to a particular city and posts it online. This could give an update to their fans in that city so they can plan to get a chance to take a picture with their idol. If the celebrity is fine with it then this spreads happiness across the board.

In contrast, if we look at it from a celebrity's perspective, this can be daunting in many ways. First of all, it's a major invasion of their privacy, especially for someone who wants to keep their personal life separate from their professional life. Secondly, this can also affect their mental well-being if they do not want something to be revealed to their fans but it still gets exposed because of paparazzi. For example, If a celebrity gets married in an intimate ceremony and they want to keep their marriage private. A photoghrapher captures them dining in a restaurant with their partner. It gets posted online, which causes their privacy is to be massively intervened but also an intimate moment gets leaked on social media. This can have adverse effects on them psychologically and also impacts their family life.

In conclusion, getting star-stuck by a famous person and wanting to get regular updates about their life on a daily basis via paparazzi could be amusing for their fans, and they would argue that it's a good practice. Celebrities themselves gravely suffer from this and their privacy is at stake. This is not so amusing for them, and reasonably wrong.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and make your own position clear: the first main paragraph explains fans’ interest and possible enjoyment, while the second argues that following celebrities invades privacy and can harm their well-being. The examples of fans meeting a celebrity and a private marriage being exposed help make the discussion relevant. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the benefits are mainly framed as updates and a chance to meet an idol, while the harms receive more explanation. The conclusion also says the practice is “reasonably wrong” without clarifying whether you oppose all photography or only intrusive pursuit. Develop the public-interest argument further and state a more precise, consistent position to make the response more fully balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “In contrast” and “In conclusion” make the direction of the discussion easy to follow, and examples are placed alongside the relevant claims. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and also shows some stronger control through paragraphing and progression. At times, however, links are mechanical or the reference is unclear. For example, “So this trend interests the fans and also the photographers because it's they make an earning from this” is awkwardly connected, and “This” in the final paragraph could refer to several preceding ideas. Use more precise referencing and vary how you connect explanations and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including relevant terms such as “paparazzi,” “invasion of their privacy,” “mental well-being,” and “adverse effects.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and you attempt less common expressions such as “intimate ceremony.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, though: “getting star-stuck by a famous person” does not express the intended idea, “privacy is to be massively intervened” is not idiomatic, and “make an earning” is awkward. There is also a spelling error in “photoghrapher.” These issues do not prevent understanding, but more precise, natural phrasing would strengthen the response. Prefer established expressions such as “star-struck,” “earn money,” and “privacy was seriously violated.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including conditional clauses (“If the celebrity is fine with it”) and a relative clause (“someone who wants to keep their personal life separate”). Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “because it's they make an earning” has faulty clause structure, and “which causes their privacy is to be massively intervened” combines incompatible structures. The sentence beginning “This could give an update” also shifts from a photographer’s action to what the update enables without a fully clear grammatical link. Review clause construction and punctuation, especially when joining cause and result. More consistently accurate complex sentences would improve control while preserving the range you already attempt.

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