Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this period of modernity,many people belive that,famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go.However,in my opinion I strongly disagree with this notion and my opinion will be discussed in fureher paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.and i wll be discussed both side of views.

Now a daysmany people think famous people are public figer.they have not any personal space.they want to know thier any types of personal life, personal photographed.for example,some famous people go to see ,spend thier personal time with thier family member.some people wants to show thier photographed this time.because they are big fan this famous person.

On the other hands,many people belive that.every person have a personal life.they has right to spend thier life freely.all photographer do not need distirb them.for instance,when some famous person send thier family time any photographer do not take photo without thier permison.they think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Farthermor in my opinion,photpgrapher should not any photography without this person.

In conclosion,I strongly belive that,every person have thier privacy.I belive that aforementioned points are strongly supporting my view points.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear opinion against photographers following famous people, especially in “photographers should not [take] any photography without this person[’s permission],” and you attempt to discuss both the public’s interest and celebrities’ privacy. However, the two views are only minimally explained: the public-interest paragraph says fans want photographs but does not explain why this interest is beneficial, while the opposing view is also brief and repetitive. The conclusion restates your position without adding support. The response contains 164 words, so it is 86 words below the 250-word minimum; 19 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each side with a reason and a relevant example, then explain how these support your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting contrasting views, a paragraph for your opinion, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “However,” “On the other hands,” and “In conclusion” signal some intended progression. However, the sequence is not consistently clear: the introduction repeats that the essay will discuss both sides, and the separate opinion paragraph is too short to advance the argument. Several sentences within paragraphs are difficult to follow, and linking words are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately. For example, “Furthermore” introduces a point that largely repeats the previous paragraph. Use each paragraph to develop one clear idea, and connect examples explicitly to the point they illustrate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “professional photographers,” “personal space,” “family,” and “privacy,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain the reader’s understanding. Examples include “public figer” for “public figures,” “thier” for “their,” “distirb” for “disturb,” and “permison” for “permission.” Phrases such as “personal photographed” and “spend their family time” are not natural collocations. Build a more accurate range for discussing media attention and privacy, and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “public curiosity,” “intrude on someone’s privacy,” and “media coverage” where they fit your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple statements and some longer sentences, including “because they are big fan this famous person,” but control of sentence structure is very limited. Frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “every person have a personal life” should use a singular verb, while “they has right” combines an incorrect verb form with a missing article. The opening also joins several ideas with full stops and commas in ways that obscure the structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with clauses such as “because” or “although.” Check subject–verb agreement and punctuation when editing.

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