Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern world, social media taking over everywhere. Celebrities such as actors, sports players and influencers are always seen surrounded by photographers. There's partial audience argue that this does not looks relevant, whether others counter this comment. However, in further arguments we will discuss both view points, followed with my personal remark.

Commencing with the most salient reason why specialized photographers are always tailed with celebrities wherever they go. Moreover, they do have their own personal life as well. Thus, we should cover vital aspects of society and global world and deliver those news to public. Most photojournalists are just working to get better TRP for their company and celebrities are having huge fan following around the world.

However, with the advancement of technology, individuals life goals has changed. Therefore, celebrities are role models for new generation and they always follows their favourite celebrities. So, photographers are just working as a mediator, who provide upadates of a famous personality to its fans. Nevertheless, we all are working for money and celeibrities always requies to be in time line and public touch, which is fulfilled through professional cameraman. In addition, cameraman gets excessive viewerships, this way both gets beneifited.

To conclude, famous personalities are always traced because people sees themself in them and wants become like them. Photographers are just a source to provide update to people about their loved famous personality. Such fan following gives celebrities assurance of their success. Yet, such activities should be limited for safety.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views and give a position: you explain that readers want updates about celebrities and conclude that photographers provide this service, while adding that the activity should be limited for safety. However, the opposing view—that constant pursuit invades privacy or causes harm—is not clearly explained, so the discussion is only partial. Several points, such as celebrities’ fan following and photographers’ viewership, are asserted rather than supported with a specific reason or example. The opening also promises a discussion without stating a clear opinion, and the final position is brief. The response is one word below the required minimum. Develop both sides with relevant examples and state your view clearly from the introduction onward.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Some linking expressions, including “However,” “Therefore” and “In addition,” signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph begins with a fragment about photographers following celebrities, then shifts to their personal lives and news coverage without explaining the connection. The second paragraph moves from role models to money and viewership, making the argument feel like a list. Phrases such as “in further arguments” and “followed with my personal remark” are awkward and do not guide the reader effectively. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, explain it in sequence, and use clearer references between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “photojournalists,” “role models,” “fan following,” “viewership” and “mediator.” This shows an effort to discuss the media and celebrity culture rather than relying only on basic words. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow: “partial audience,” “gets better TRP,” “in time line,” and “loved famous personality” are not suitable expressions in these contexts. Spelling errors such as “upadates,” “celeibrities,” “requies” and “beneifited” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, use “some members of the public,” “gain higher ratings,” and “remain in the public eye.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “who” and “which.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. The opening, “In this modern world, social media taking over everywhere,” lacks a finite verb. Other examples include “does not looks,” “individuals life goals has changed,” and “they always follows,” where verb forms or subject–verb agreement are incorrect. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “the public” and “both view points.” Some sentences join ideas without a clear grammatical relationship. Practise complete sentence patterns, agreement, possessives and articles, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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