Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These days professional photographers follow and take photos of well renowned individuals everywhere. Although some people argue that this is a positive aspect as fans are interested in their life, I firmly support those who believe that it is a negative aspect as famous person also has a personal life and needs a free space.

On the one hand, public are interested in the life of a famous person and want to know each and every details. It is the reason why photographers follow these well-known people and cover their everyday life. For instance, the famous football player Ronaldo is followed by a huge number of people in social media and every place possible,hence a professional photographer follows and take picture of Ronaldo wherever he goes as it helps to get the attention of people and more followers foe themselves as people will follow them thinking that he/she provides almost every details of this player.

On the other hand, famous people are also normal human being, they also need free perosnal time. If the photographers follow them everywhere, they would not be able to enjoy their life. Additionally, the family members of these personnel also suffer from overattention which is not preferred. For example, when Dhoni, a famous cricket player of India, goes to visit any place with her girlfriend, he usually use helmet or masks in order to hide his identity. He does that because his girlfriend do not seek any attention from the media and want to like a simple life.

In conclusion, the professional photographers following a famous person might be good for the fans but I firmly agree that it is a negative aspect as it hampers the perosnal life of these famous people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and make your own position clear from the introduction: you acknowledge public interest but argue that photographers intrude on celebrities’ personal lives. The two body paragraphs are relevant, and the Ronaldo and Dhoni examples help illustrate the competing points. This meets the task well overall. However, the public-interest argument is explained mainly through social-media attention and photographers gaining followers, rather than exploring why audiences value access to celebrities’ lives. The privacy argument is somewhat more developed, but the example about Dhoni’s girlfriend is not fully connected to the broader effects of persistent photography. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation of its consequences and support the examples more precisely to make the discussion more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your opinion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow. The main ideas are generally grouped appropriately, and the reader can understand the contrast between public interest and privacy. Some connections within sentences are less controlled, however, as in “every place possible,hence,” where the punctuation and relationship between ideas are unclear. The first body paragraph also moves quickly from fans’ interest to photographers’ desire for followers. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and vary transitions so the organisation feels less formulaic and more smoothly connected.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “professional photographers,” “well-known,” “attention,” and “personal life,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at less common or topic-specific wording, such as “overattention” and “hampers,” but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural. Examples include “free space” for personal privacy, “each and every details,” and “foe themselves,” which appears to be a spelling error. “Personnel” is also not the right word for family members in this context. These noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems limit precision. Build a bank of natural phrases for privacy and media coverage, and check spelling and word forms carefully when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a concession in the opening (“Although some people argue…”) and conditional phrasing (“If the photographers follow them everywhere…”). This gives the response some structural variety, and the main message remains understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms recur. For example, “public are interested” needs an article or a different construction, “each and every details” has a number-agreement problem, and “he usually use” should have a singular verb. The sentence beginning “famous people are also normal human being, they also need…” joins two independent clauses incorrectly. Review subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries, and aim to produce more consistently accurate complex sentences.

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