Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In recent years, celebrities are constantly followed by photographers. While some people believe this is positive because fans want to see their lives, others argue it is an invasion of privacy.
On one hand photograping famous people can be beneficial. The public is highly interested in the lives of their favourite stars, and photos in magazines and social media satisfy this curiosity. This interest helps the enterainment industry to thrive, as it keeps celebrities popular and relevant. For example, when a famous person seen supporting a charity or living a healthy lifestyle it can inspire millions of fans to do the same. Therfore, photographers play a role in connecting stars with the public.
On the other hand, many people think it is wrong to constantly follow famous peole. The main reason is that it voilates their privacy. Celebrities are human beings too, and they need personal space to live a normal life with their families. When photograper follows every events at day and night, It can cause stress and anxiety.
In my opinion, although public interest is understandable, photographers should respect the privacy of famous people. There should be strict laws to prevent them from taking photos in private places. Public events are acceptable, but private life should not be disturbed.
Overall, while photograhing celebrities has some benefits for the public and the industry, the negative impact on their mental health and safety is more serious.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You address both views and give a clear opinion: the benefits include satisfying public curiosity and inspiring fans, while your position is that privacy should be respected. The example of a celebrity supporting charity is relevant, and the distinction between public events and private life helps clarify your view. However, the opposing view is developed more fully than the case for photographers: the benefits are mostly asserted, with limited explanation of how public interest supports the industry. The privacy argument also needs a more specific example or fuller explanation of the effects on families and wellbeing. The response is 14 words below the required minimum, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement; use the extra space to extend and support these ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a concluding summary. Linking phrases such as “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In my opinion” make the progression easy to follow, and the conclusion reflects the position already stated. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the stronger control associated with more flexible cohesion. However, the linking is somewhat formulaic, and the final paragraph repeats the main contrast rather than adding a final implication. Develop smoother links between claims and examples, and use referencing more precisely—for instance, clarify what “this interest” refers to and connect the charity example directly to the benefit being discussed.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use an adequate range for the topic, including relevant terms such as “invasion of privacy,” “personal space,” “stress and anxiety,” and “mental health.” These choices make your main points clear, and phrases such as “popular and relevant” show an attempt to express ideas beyond basic vocabulary. However, spelling errors are noticeable, including “photograping,” “enterainment,” “Therfore,” “peole,” and “voilates.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “follows every events at day and night.” These errors do not prevent understanding, but they limit the accuracy and control of your vocabulary. Proofread carefully and learn natural collocations for describing media attention and privacy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including the contrast structure “While some people believe…, others argue…” and the conditional idea “When a photographer follows…, it can cause…”. Most sentences communicate their meaning, and the overall argument remains easy to understand. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In “when a famous person seen supporting,” the verb “is” is missing; “every events” has a number-agreement problem; and “When photograper follows…” needs an article before the singular countable noun. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “It” after a comma. Aim to check verb forms, articles, singular and plural nouns, and sentence punctuation. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen the range you already attempt.
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