Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

this is rally common thing for now a days famous people are taking thir photo graph with the pjrofessional people so they get a better picture.this now become common for the normal people too.beause when there is any wedding and program we normally call the professional photographer to take picture. and we also give the referrance to take picute like the famous people. and we also get interest to their live and can take the good thing form their life.and there is some people they thing that this is wrong to follow the famous people to see their photograph and follow them.they this some femous people take some badpicture like they are drinking or smoking. and normal people also drink and smoke like them.not only that they may do some bad wok and spread that to the the local people by posting there picyure to the socila media.lots of people follwe this and do the same thing. and it become a bad impect to our social life.but as a human bing every people has his own jusment they should take the good thing from any person photo.so as a human every people should take the good thing from the photo of a famous person.if every body take good part from the professional photo it will be the greate achivement for the society. every body will do the good thing. as good sitizen of my country i feel professional photo graphy and follow the famous people is not bad if we follow the good thing .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: you explain that people are interested in famous people’s lives and that following them can expose the public to harmful behaviour such as smoking or drinking. You also give a personal position, concluding that following celebrities is acceptable if people focus on positive examples. However, the discussion is only partial and the ideas remain under-developed. The point about professional photographers at weddings shifts attention from the question of photographing celebrities, while the possible harm to society is asserted rather than illustrated or explained. Make the two viewpoints more distinct, explain why public interest might justify or fail to justify intrusive photography, and support your opinion with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable movement from public interest, to concerns about harmful influence, and finally to your opinion. Basic linking expressions such as “and,” “not only that,” and “but” help show some relationships between ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the two views and your conclusion are difficult to distinguish. Many points are joined by repeated “and,” and references such as “they” and “this” are sometimes unclear. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and organise each paragraph around one main point. A wider, more precise range of linking phrases and clearer references would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “professional photographer,” “social media,” “smoking,” and “good thing,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “good thing” and “famous people.” Numerous spelling errors, including “femous,” “picyure,” and “socila,” make the writing harder to read. Some word combinations are also unclear, such as “take the good thing from their life” and “bad impact to our social life.” Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations carefully; for example, describe the positive influence people may draw from celebrities rather than referring vaguely to “good things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that celebrities’ behaviour may influence ordinary people. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to form longer sentences often contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “this now become common” and “every people has his own,” where the verb forms and agreement are not controlled. Articles and sentence boundaries are also frequently problematic, as in the opening run-on passage. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.” Check subject–verb agreement, tense, and punctuation when editing.

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