Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

It is argued that famous people being photographed by photographers everywhere they go is a good thing because it gives the public a sneak peek in the lives of people they look up to. However, some believe it is wrong because it invades their privacy and deprives them of valuable family time. This essay sides with the latter.

Famous people are just like all of us, they are normal human beings in the first place. They have families, they love to travel, and just like us, love to go to coffee shops and restaurants. They have a right to their privacy and deserve as much family time as we do. However, it is difficult to do so when every public appearance of yours is being photographed and posted online. People online have all kinds of things to say about you, your dressing, your family members and etc. While they are used to dealing with the spotlight and constructive criticism, their families and loved ones are not. For instance, the captain of the Indian cricket team Virat Kohli permanently moved to the UK after a picture of his daughter, who he never posted online about, was leaked to a local newspaper.

Some people argue that the spotlight and the attention comes with your profession. They believe it is a mere consequence of being famous. Every public appearance and action will be judged because it is just a part of it. While it is true that famous people are seen as role models and should be conscious of their actions, it is not something they choose for themselves. They have every right to not be harassed in public and nor do their families. If they are not practicing their profession, they don't need to be clicked. If someone really wants to photograph them, they should ask for permission first.

It will always be wrong to photograph famous people in public when they have not signed up for it and are just spending time with their family members or pursuing a hobby. It violates their privacy, makes them uncomfortable and ruins their their family time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“This essay sides with the latter”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You address both views: the privacy argument is developed through family life and online exposure, while the opposing view—that attention comes with fame—is presented and then challenged. The example involving Virat Kohli gives the discussion a concrete illustration. This is a well-focused response with relevant support. To develop the discussion further, explain more fully why the public values photographs of famous people, rather than mainly describing that interest as a “sneak peek.” The claim that Kohli moved permanently to the UK because of one leaked photograph is also presented as fact without explanation; qualify or substantiate it so the example strengthens the argument rather than seeming over-generalised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The essay follows a clear progression: introduction and position, a paragraph developing privacy concerns, a paragraph presenting and rebutting the opposing view, and a concise conclusion. Linking expressions such as “However,” “For instance,” and “While it is true” help signal contrasts and examples, and the central argument is easy to follow. Paragraphing is appropriate and each body paragraph has a recognisable purpose. Some connections could be made more precise: the shift from the public’s interest in celebrities to the detailed discussion of family privacy is understandable, but the first view receives little explanation. Also, “Some people argue” introduces the counterargument, yet a clearer account of why audiences support celebrity photography would improve the balance and progression of the discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary to discuss privacy and public attention, including “invades their privacy,” “spotlight,” “harassed,” and “role models.” These choices communicate the argument clearly, and phrases such as “a sneak peek” add an accessible, conversational tone. At times, however, wording is imprecise or informal for an academic essay: “your dressing” is not the natural expression here, and “clicked” is less suitable than “photographed.” “And etc.” is redundant, while “ruins their their family time” contains an accidental repetition. The phrase “signed up for it” is also conversational. Greater consistency in formal register and more precise collocations would build on the range already shown and make the expression more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

You demonstrate a useful variety of sentence forms, including complex clauses with “because,” “when,” and “while,” as well as a conditional construction: “If someone really wants to photograph them, they should ask for permission first.” Many sentences are accurate and the meaning remains clear throughout. A few errors persist. In “the spotlight and the attention comes,” the plural subject requires “come”; “nor do their families” is awkwardly attached to the preceding clause and would be clearer as a separate construction. The final sentence repeats “their” (“ruins their their family time”), and “they are normal human beings in the first place” is less smoothly structured than the surrounding prose. Review agreement, clause connections, and proofreading for repeated words to improve the consistency of your otherwise good control.

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