Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is an ongoing debate about wether photographers have the right to take pictures for celebraties whenever or wherever they are. While some would argue that well- known personalities are normal individuals and they need their privicy, other would claim that their work impose on them such a specefic lifestyle.

On the one hand, celebraties have the right to live quiet life beyond cameras. Consequently, Photographers should respect their personal choice and make distinction between the human and the star they deal with. Some extreme atitudes of paparazzi may cause catastrophes such as Princess Diana tragic death. Therefore, the government should impose strict laws to panish any freedom violation.

On the other hand, some people claims that stars should understand the nature of their work. They are considred a role model which comes with a heavy expense, they are always exposed to pressure and stress.Moreover, teenagers demand their news and up- to dates about their latest news ,as a result, magazines, tv and tabloids generates huge amount of money from those photographs. For instance, well- known atheletes or tv stars are followed by handredes of funs wherever they appear, an occassion for mass media to photograph them.

In conclusion, being a star does not allow photographersto take advantage of famous people. violating there personal life could be a crime. In the same time, star life is e

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both perspectives: the first body paragraph argues that celebrities deserve privacy, while the second explains that public interest and media demand are part of their work. Your own view is also apparent in the conclusion, where you say fame does not justify taking advantage of people. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The Diana example supports the privacy argument, but the opposing view is mostly asserted through claims about role models and teenagers’ interest, without explaining why this makes intrusive photography acceptable. The conclusion is cut off at “star life is e,” so your final position is not fully completed. The response also falls 23 words short of the required minimum. Develop both sides with clearer reasoning and finish the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting opposing views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the basic organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven. In the second body paragraph, the move from celebrities’ work to teenagers’ interest and then to media profits is not fully explained, and “their latest news” is repetitive. Some linking is mechanical, particularly “as a result,” where the relationship between teenagers’ interest and media profits needs clearer phrasing. The final sentence is incomplete, which disrupts the ending. Use clearer links between each claim and its supporting explanation, and ensure the conclusion forms a complete final paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “paparazzi,” “personal choice,” “role model,” “pressure and stress,” and “freedom violation.” These choices show an attempt to discuss privacy and the media rather than relying only on basic words. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “wether,” “celebraties,” “privicy,” “specefic,” “panish,” and “handredes of funs.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “heavy expense” and “up-to-dates.” Repetition of “news” further limits the range. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for discussing privacy, public attention, and media coverage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “While some would argue…” and a result clause introduced by “Consequently.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur in both sentence structure and basic grammar. For example, “other would claim” needs a plural subject, while “some people claims” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence joining “They are considered a role model” to “they are always exposed” is a comma splice, and “magazines, tv and tabloids generates” also has incorrect agreement. The final sentence is incomplete, leaving the grammatical relationship unfinished. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and revise complex sentences to ensure each clause is complete.

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