Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Eminent celebrities have always been in the limelight since the growth of the media industry, and professionals from different industries are always treated as a centre of attraction. These people are followed by paparazzi, reporters, and many others. Professional Photographs are essential for them because they indirectly promote them and their lifestyle; conversely, some Famous people consider it a privacy breach, and both arguments are crucial for a debate.
Paparazzi are part of this media and industry and are considered a stakeholder. Photographes clicked by professionals are later posted on digital platforms and even in newspapers and magazines. It develops as a significant factor for famous people, as it provides them a platform to reach all segments of society. As newspapers and magazines are read by the older genration and on the other hand, social media content is highly watched by young folks. Some celebrities and photographers do admit that paparazzi are deliberately informed by the management of famous individuals to click their pictures at airports, festivals, restaurants and many more places. This is done to show their presence to the general public and draw their attention in their lifestyle.
Conversely, not everyone likes to be followed by photographers, because they believe they have a personal life as well, and people should respect it too. There are many incidents in the past where a famous person gets frustrated and exhausted due to unnecessary attention given to them. From my perspective, I also consider it as tangent to be reconsidered, perhaps photographers should ask for a permission from them, because they want to spend their leisure time with family and do not want their family members to be xposed to camera.
Moreover, if they are entertainers, sports person or any other member of different industry, they should be treated as one of us and respect their space and emotions too.
Ultimately, it mostly depends on the need of the individual, if their scope is to get some attention and maintain their fandom then they have to utilize this thing as tool for promoting themselves. On the other hand, famous people who not found of this limelight should be polite and refuse them for pictures to maintainbalance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response discusses both perspectives and gives a personal view: it explains how photographs can promote celebrities and argues that their privacy and family time should also be respected. The position is present, particularly in the paragraph beginning “From my perspective,” and the conclusion recognises that individuals may differ in whether they welcome publicity. However, the discussion is uneven. The promotional benefit is illustrated with examples of media platforms and staged appearances, while the opposing view relies mainly on general references to frustration and privacy, without a specific example or fuller explanation of the harm caused. The final suggestion that celebrities should “refuse them for pictures” also leaves the writer’s preferred approach somewhat unclear. Develop both sides more evenly and state a consistent view on whether following people in public is acceptable.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding paragraph. Linking expressions such as “Conversely,” “Moreover,” and “Ultimately” help signal shifts in the discussion, and the reader can follow the main line of argument. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “As newspapers and magazines are read by the older generation and on the other hand…” joins contrasting points awkwardly, while “it mostly depends on the need of the individual” does not clearly connect the conclusion to the earlier argument about photographers’ conduct. Some references, including “this thing,” are also vague. Use clearer topic sentences and make each paragraph’s examples directly support its central point; this would make progression smoother and cohesion less dependent on signposting phrases.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The response shows an adequate range and attempts less common vocabulary, including “limelight,” “stakeholder,” “privacy breach,” and “deliberately informed.” These choices help discuss media attention and celebrity privacy, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “Professional Photographs are essential for them,” “tangent to be reconsidered,” and “maintain their fandom.” There are also spelling errors, including “Photographes,” “genration,” and “xposed,” alongside inconsistent capitalisation of “Famous.” These slips do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and polish. Prefer familiar, accurate collocations where uncertain, and proofread spelling and capitalisation. For instance, “publicity photographs can promote them” is clearer than saying photographs are “essential.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because,” “as,” and “if,” and most ideas remain understandable. Some sentences are controlled, such as “There are many incidents in the past where a famous person gets frustrated and exhausted due to unnecessary attention given to them.” However, some grammatical errors occur in longer constructions. In “if their scope is to get some attention … then they have to utilize this thing,” the conditional structure is awkward, and “famous people who not found of this limelight” is missing an auxiliary verb. The sentence beginning “As newspapers and magazines are read…” is also incomplete or poorly joined to the following contrast. Review clause construction, verb forms, and punctuation, especially in long sentences. Breaking complex ideas into two well-formed sentences would improve accuracy while retaining variety.
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