Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this situation, many professional photographers have their own jobs on celebrities. Actors and actress have their own respective photographers, they have a big contribution of social media where people able to follow them every day. Celebrities are very showy when it comes to social life, they are always passionable and elegant with their posture captured by their professional photographers.

On the one hand, it is a good thing how photographers really contributes on social media to make their clients satisfied with their shots and post it to facebook or instagram. Whereas, many people are always watching out with their post and they are really interested of how they influenced them in nowadays generation.

On the another hand, some people thinking of photographers they have a bad influence to famous people. Liked, pornographic photos that make people on social media influence them to copy. However young people, will encourage them to admire those kinds of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify both sides of the issue: public interest in celebrities’ lives and the possibility that photographers can have a harmful influence. However, the discussion is only partial and the response does not give a clear personal opinion, as the task requires. The point about photographers helping clients post attractive images is relevant, but it does not fully explain why the public’s interest makes following celebrities a good thing. The concern about “pornographic photos” is also introduced without explaining how it relates to photographers following famous people. The response is substantially below the required 250 words, so there is not enough development, reasoning, or relevant example to address the task adequately. State your view directly and support each side with specific explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic attempt at organising the discussion: the opening introduces the topic, followed by paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the another hand.” These signposts help the reader recognise the two viewpoints. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because ideas are brief and connections are not always clear. For example, the link between photographers posting images and people being “interested of how they influenced them” is unclear. The final paragraph also ends mid-idea, leaving the discussion unfinished. Develop one main point at a time, explain how it supports the viewpoint, and use clear references and transitions rather than relying mainly on formulaic signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “professional photographers,” “celebrities,” “social media,” and “influence,” so the subject is generally recognisable. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “elegant” and “contribution.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make meaning harder to understand: “have their own jobs on celebrities,” “passionable,” and “watching out with their post.” Some word forms and collocations are also unsuitable, such as “Actors and actress” and “interested of.” Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “photograph celebrities,” “share images online,” and “take an interest in their private lives.” This would make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for an IELTS discussion essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the contrast between viewpoints is signalled with phrases such as “On the one hand” and “On the another hand.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “many professional photographers have their own jobs on celebrities” has an unclear sentence structure, while “many people are always watching out with their post” contains problems with the verb pattern and reference. In “some people thinking of photographers,” the clause lacks a correctly formed verb. There are also agreement and article errors, as in “photographers really contributes” and “the another hand.” Practise complete clauses, subject–verb agreement, and accurate sentence boundaries before attempting longer structures.

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