Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this fast paced era,Photography has come into existence with great techniques or sources that we can see the new ways of preserving memories in terms of magazines and hd visualizer videos etc.Whether some individuals think that this is not good for the photographers to follow celebes or the other are totally opposite and they say this is okay.This essay would discuss about the opinions from both sides

Firstly, The main reason is entertainment and social figure.People who love to admire famous people follow them everywhere So they want their lives to be recorded and they see them as their admirer and basically it's called a fan moment. For instance if i love to watch ranbir kapoor, celeb from bollywood industry in India, i would love to watch him and only internet will provide their pictures.This would be a great sources to show their lives to fans.

On the other hand, opposite reason would be hard images. To explain further,as photographers click the pictures some images are not shown as good to the ordinary people, Everyone is using cellphones and the bold picture will not have a good effect on the viewers that can be an adult even a children also. For example, Some times parents are not even capable of sitting with adults during these moments as this content is meant to be normal.

In my opinion,i firmly believe that either photography can be bad and good in terms of entertainment to boldness and we should look into this by our own choice.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both perspectives and include a personal view, so the response is relevant to the prompt. However, the discussion only partially addresses the central issue: the first paragraph focuses on fans wanting to see celebrities, while the opposing paragraph shifts to “hard images” and their effect on children, rather than explaining why photographers should or should not follow famous people. The example of Ranbir Kapoor illustrates interest in a celebrity, but the other example is difficult to understand and does not clearly support the argument. Your conclusion—“either photography can be bad and good”—does not establish a clear position. Explain the privacy and public-interest arguments directly, develop each with a relevant example, and state which view you support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. These markers help readers identify the intended stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, the move from photographers taking pictures to “hard images” and then to parents not being able to sit with adults is difficult to follow. The introduction also promises to discuss both views without clearly previewing them. Use topic sentences that state each argument, then connect explanation and example explicitly. Clearer paragraph development and more precise referencing would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “preserving memories,” “famous people,” “recorded,” and “viewers,” and you use some topic-specific language such as “Bollywood industry.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear. “Hard images” does not clearly describe the concern, while “bold picture” and “fan moment” are imprecise in this context. Phrases such as “great sources” and “new ways” are also vague. Aim for accurate terms connected to the prompt, such as privacy, intrusive photography, public interest, and media coverage. More precise vocabulary would help you express the arguments without relying on general or confusing wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “if I love to watch Ranbir Kapoor” and a sentence explaining that photographs may affect viewers. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “Whether some individuals think … or the other are totally opposite” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “a great sources” has incorrect number agreement. There are also problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, such as the run-on opening and missing spaces after commas. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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