Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern era people love to watch what there idol are doing in there day to day lifestyle. Paparazzi play a crucial role in capturing their photographs of famous people where they go,what they eat,what they wear. It is their job to capture picture and post on article or on social media apps so that their fans stay upto date about thier idols whom they follow and admire. By the photograph we can relate to there lifestyle.

Moreover,Every coin as two sides If we think that professional photographers donot follow famous peoples for picture how come they fans know about thier life and relationship status.For example if justin beiber is in relationship how come a normal person get update about thier role model here when paparazzi come ups they click and post then a normal person know what is going on in thier lifes as they are doing thier job and keep the fans update about their role model.

Furthermore, there is negative side of this as famous people have their personal life which tey do not want to share but professional photographers did not think about it but they still post it on social media no matter even if there threat to their life by showing where they are going on daily basis.

In Conclusion, I suggest that we should respect their work and keep it limited to interfier in the life let them enjoy as normal people when they are with their children or family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the first paragraph explains that fans want updates, while the third recognises that photographers can invade celebrities’ privacy and expose their whereabouts. Your conclusion also gives a preference for limiting interference. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The benefits are mainly presented as keeping fans informed, and the example about Justin Bieber does not explain why public interest should justify constant photography. Your position is also not fully clear: “respect their work” sits uneasily beside the call to limit interference. The response contains 248 words, so it falls two words short of the required minimum. Develop each view with a clearer reason or example, and state your own position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, separate discussion of benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “In Conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is limited: the second paragraph repeats the idea that paparazzi keep fans updated rather than extending it with a distinct point. Some links are mechanical, and the long sentence beginning “For example if…” is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear punctuation. References such as “they” and “their” are sometimes unclear. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it, using linking expressions and pronouns more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “Paparazzi,” “professional photographers,” “relationship status,” and “personal life,” which makes the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “keep the fans update,” “click and post,” and repeated references to “their life.” Spelling and word-form errors—including “thier,” “upto,” and “photograph” where the plural is needed—also make the writing less clear and controlled. Aim for more precise collocations and vary repeated wording; for example, describe photographers as “publishing images” and fans as “following celebrity news.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural phrases will make your meaning easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “people love to watch what there idol are doing” has problems with the determiner, number agreement, and verb form. In “how come they fans know,” the possessive structure is incorrect, while “there threat to their life” lacks a clear grammatical construction. Several sentences run together, particularly the Justin Bieber example, and punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, possessives, articles, and sentence boundaries. Shorter, correctly punctuated sentences would help you express your ideas clearly while you build confidence with complex structures.

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