Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In these days, due to constant media attention popular personals are phtographed by trained photographers. While some peole argue that it fair to know more about their personal life, others believe that it unfair act by the photographers to interfare in their privte life. I think it justified to have more knowledge about the public personality. On the one side argument, people who find this fair might agrgue that persons with such qualities are fewer and how they become stars in short period of time with these skills. They, also. want to know how these are paid huge salaries when they compare with other important professionals suc as specialist surgeons, reseach scientists,and even leading politicians who have responsibilities to run the government.In addition, many people like follow their styles and they want more information how they develop these activities without any hard work.Therfore, these people think that photographers are performing well when following these stars and celebrities and capture in into their cameras. On the side many people opose photographers ways of following such individuals, because some time they flot those information that incorrect about them, due to this there negative expression spread into public. Therefore, it affects thier popularity in folks which of course adversely affect their growth in their relavant field. Also there is little private life out of spotlight and pressure of media is constant, they have perform well when ever tested in their field. In conclusion, I think that to follow such personality is positive but after consitration their personal will not be aeffected by photographers actions.Given the situation, it recommended that do c

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear opinion in the opening, saying that it is “justified to have more knowledge” about public figures, and you discuss both public interest and the harm caused by intrusive or inaccurate reporting. The point that false information can damage a celebrity’s reputation is relevant, as is the idea that people want to understand how famous individuals live. However, several supporting claims are unclear or insufficiently explained—for example, the comparison with surgeons, scientists and politicians does not clearly show why photographers should follow celebrities. The conclusion is also incomplete (“it recommended that do c”), so your final position and proposed qualification about privacy are not fully expressed. Develop each view with clearer reasoning and finish with a complete, direct conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a concluding paragraph. Signposts such as “On the one side” and “In conclusion” help readers identify the stages of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and some linking is mechanical or unclear. For instance, “Therefore” introduces a consequence after the point about incorrect information, but the relationship between that information and reduced popularity needs clearer explanation. The first body paragraph also moves from rarity of talent to salaries and then to following celebrities’ styles without a clear connecting line. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, then arrange supporting reasons in a logical order and make references such as “these” and “their” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary suited to the topic, including “media attention,” “personal life,” “responsibilities,” “spotlight,” and “adversely affect.” These choices show an effort to discuss privacy and public image rather than relying only on basic words. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “people,” “information,” and “photographers,” while frequent spelling and word-choice errors make some phrases difficult to understand. Examples include “popular personals,” “negative expression spread into public,” and “capture in into their cameras.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “follow their styles.” Build accuracy alongside range by learning common collocations for media coverage, reputation and privacy, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast in the opening (“While some… others…”) and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation frequently interrupt the message. For example, “it fair to know” and “it unfair act” omit necessary verb forms, while “they have perform well” has an incorrect verb pattern. The final sentence is incomplete, and the opening contains a long run-on structure that makes the argument harder to follow. Practise building accurate sentences first, especially with “it is,” subject–verb agreement and infinitive forms; then combine ideas using subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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