Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the recent era, professional photographers are following the celebrities and capturing every moments of them. However, some individuals are intrested in famous person's lifestyle and daily activities, others are disagreed with this act. This essay will discuss both perspectives and I believe that photographers do not need to capture someone's private moment without any permission.

On the one hand, having paparazzi on the speacial screening or moments are considered as the one of the best use of technology and media. Additionally, it automatically draws people's attention to that special moments and it gives more clarity and popularity to upcoming project of that special person. For example, on the movie promotions, actors weried coustume apperience will not only gives marketing boost by the photographes but also increse public attention towards the movie. Hence, clicking photos of heros on the special moments will actually generate more organic public intrest.

On the other hand, nowadays, paparazzi groups are following famous persenality here and there. However, few people opposing this kind of act. The simple reasoan is, everyone has right to live a life without judging. As those moments on the interenet are destroying their upcoming projects or maybe harmful to their mental peace. For instance, one of the beef eating photo of bollywood actor ranveer kapoor is viral and in upcoming movie is playing one of lord's role. So that time, this trend is backfired to the actor. Thus, people judge their private life with the movie role character, that is completely wrong.

In conclusion, It is cleared from discussion that clicking private event photos without permission should not be ethical and it should not be promoted.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and make your own position clear: you accept that publicity can benefit celebrities’ projects, but argue that photographing private moments without permission is unethical. The examples about movie promotions and an actor’s viral photograph help make the discussion relevant. However, the first view is mainly explained in terms of publicity and marketing, rather than the public’s interest in celebrities’ lives, so this part does not fully match the prompt. The second example is also difficult to follow, and the link between the photograph, the actor’s role, and the harm caused needs clearer explanation. Develop each side more evenly and explain how your examples support your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow, and the main position remains consistent. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, connections within paragraphs are occasionally mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “Hence” and “Thus,” and some references are unclear. For example, “that special moments” and “this trend” do not identify precisely what is being discussed. Use more precise referencing and connect each example directly to the point it illustrates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “paparazzi,” “public attention,” “private moment,” and “mental peace,” and the reader can generally understand your ideas. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “marketing boost” and “backfired.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning harder to interpret: “intrested,” “speacial,” “weried coustume apperience,” and “organic public intrest.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “one of the best use of technology and media.” Check spelling carefully and choose more conventional collocations; precise, natural wording will make your argument clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses with “However” and a reason introduced by “As.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, and the essay has a recognisable sentence structure. However, control is inconsistent, especially with agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “it automatically draws … and it gives” does not agree clearly with the plural “moments,” while “actors … will not only gives” combines an incorrect verb form with a faulty construction. “Everyone has right” also needs an article. Some sentences, such as the one beginning “As those moments,” are incomplete or awkwardly connected. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, then review agreement and articles.

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