Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that famous people being photographed everywhere is really disrespectful for the person , As they usually are followed without their consent , However some people argue that public is interested in their lives that's why it's a good thing.

Intially some people support idea of photographing famous people as they like to follow thier daily life which sometimes inspire's them or motivate them to follow that kind of lifestyle , However most of the photographer's are paid to photograph celeb's as those image's generate huge revenue for media house's. Moreover it is also benefical for the celeb or famous personality as it sometime's keep them in limelight which promote's their upcoming project's.

Secondly some people believe that it is morally wrong to follow famous people because it damages their personal life at certain level which can cause problems like safety concern's as it feels like being followed all the time which makes some famous personality's anxious. Moreover it put's person in deep mental state as dealing with flashes and being photographed all the time can create anxiety issues , For example Justin a famous young canadian singer went into depression because of constant privacy beach by paparazzi's. Everyone's privacy should be respected.

In my opinion if you are famous that doesnt mean your life should be public all the time , Photographer's should respect and take consent all the time as some people are not comfortable sometimes or not in that state , Its a good thing if photographer's do that with consent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both perspectives and make your own position clear: you recognise public interest and possible benefits to celebrities, but conclude that photographers should obtain consent. Relevant support includes the claim that coverage can keep celebrities in the public eye and the example of a singer experiencing mental-health difficulties. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The benefits are presented as several brief claims, while the privacy argument is more fully explained through safety and anxiety. The example about Justin is also vague and does not clearly establish the cause you attribute to his depression. To strengthen the response, explain each view with a specific, carefully qualified example and develop why consent should guide your final position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting public interest, a paragraph explaining the harms of paparazzi, and a concluding opinion. Sequencing words such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “Secondly” help signal relationships between ideas. Overall, the reader can follow your argument, but some linking is mechanical, and the first body paragraph combines public interest, photographers’ earnings, and publicity for celebrities without clearly showing how each point supports the view. The opening sentence is also difficult to follow because several ideas are joined with a comma and “However.” Use clearer sentence boundaries and organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it. This would make progression more controlled and references easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “consent,” “limelight,” “revenue,” “privacy,” and “anxious,” which allows you to discuss both public interest and personal harm. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “safety concerns” and “mental state.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “privacy beach” for “privacy breach,” “deep mental state,” and “media houses.” Spelling and apostrophe errors are noticeable in forms such as “Intially,” “thier,” and “photographer's” when you mean the plural. These do not prevent the main message from being understood, but they reduce precision. Check spelling and use natural collocations, especially for key claims and examples.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “as,” “which,” and “because,” and the main argument is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “the public are interested” needs a more controlled subject–verb construction, while “it sometime's keep them” has an incorrect verb form and agreement. The opening is a run-on sentence, and the final paragraph contains a comma splice between “all the time” and “Its a good thing.” Punctuation around clauses is also inconsistent. Aim to write shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully; proofread for subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence-ending punctuation.

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