Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the present, well-known person are photographed by good photographers. They visit another places for photograph. Another people also say this is a good thing because a lot of members enthusiastic in their lives. However, other people thought photographers are not better for people. From my perspective, people should take photos and videos on their mobile phone .because it saves along of time in their phone.

Firstly, popular people wanted to take picture to photographers. Because they interested to take photos. They visit another places for making videos and photos. They only go for photographing. They don't explore the beauty of nature and attractive sides. In the wedding party some People go in park to take picture. They make a different poses. However they don't see another enthusiastic areas. They just go for their taking pictures. Mostly people go to greenery places. I think people should enjoy photographic and beauty of nature both of them. It creates a most enjoyable scene.

Secondly, other people think that photographers are not best to follow famous people.because they waste their time. They can't earn more money. Because this routine is so trouble. They can't spend time with family. On other hand, they can't go another occasion. They feel bored. When they taking picture along time.in village side people don't prefer to photographers they take photos in their cameras and mobile. They save it. When they see it again and remember their past.

Finally, people should take selfies, videos in mobile. They save their photo in mobile album. It is so beneficial for them. I think it is good thing for everyone. They should not spend a lot of money and time on this activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes an attempt to discuss both views and gives a personal preference for taking photos on mobile phones. However, it does not clearly explain the central issue: whether professional photographers are justified in following famous people because the public is interested in their lives. The first body paragraph shifts to people taking photographs at parks and weddings, which is largely unrelated to the question. The second paragraph mentions photographers’ time, income and family life, but these points are unclear and do not explain the impact of pursuing celebrities. The opinion is present, but it is not supported with relevant reasons or examples. To strengthen the response, address public interest and celebrities’ privacy directly, then develop each view with a clear explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic essay shape, with an opening, two body paragraphs and a concluding paragraph, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly” and “Finally” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, the ideas within paragraphs do not progress clearly: the discussion moves from famous people to wedding guests, parks and mobile-phone albums without explaining how these examples support the task. Some linking expressions are also awkward or do not show a clear relationship, as in “However, other people thought photographers are not better for people.” The conclusion repeats the preference for mobile phones rather than drawing together the two views. Group related points, use each paragraph to develop one side of the debate, and make links between claims and examples explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a basic range of topic-related words, including “photographers,” “famous people,” “photos,” “videos” and “mobile,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, and several word choices or combinations make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “members enthusiastic in their lives” does not clearly express public interest, while “photographers are not best to follow famous people” is an imprecise way to describe objections to pursuing celebrities. “Another enthusiastic areas” is also unclear. Build a more precise set of expressions for the topic, such as public curiosity, privacy, media attention and intrusive pursuit, and check that words combine naturally. This would make the argument clearer and less dependent on repeated uses of “take photos.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies mainly on short, simple sentences, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “because,” “however” and “when.” Frequent problems with sentence formation, verb forms, agreement and punctuation make the response difficult to read in places. Examples include “well-known person are photographed,” “They visit another places,” and “When they taking picture along time,” where agreement, plural forms or verb structure are faulty. Several fragments begin with “Because,” and the full stop before “because” in “mobile phone .because” disrupts the sentence. Work on forming complete sentences, matching subjects and verbs, and using consistent verb patterns; then practise combining related ideas accurately with subordinate clauses. These improvements would make the meaning more reliable.

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