Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Only professional photographers are hired to photographed famous people anywhere they go in the world. Some individuals agree for those who are interested in their lives. Others believe that it is a bad practice that photographer follow famous people everywhere. The essay will discuss both the sides and I will provide my opinion at the end.

Celebrities and other famous individuals lives are open to public. Photographers are hired by private companies to track their daily activity and publishing their photos to the world using social media platforms. It is actually beneficial to showoff their progess regarding their upcoming projects or any leisure activities. People witness their efforts through social media and increases interaction for the person by following their fashion or similar activities. Ultimately, their fame increases and efforts are visible to potential employers. It can leads to more work opportunities for them.

On the other side, it completely take their private lives from them. They can be potentially exposed to the world with anything happen in their personal life. Some celebrities are suffering from mental diseases like dipression or anxiety and relationship issues like divorces. Photographers continues to post their pictures inrespective of their current situation. By getting public exposure on this kind of situation, it can affect their celebritiy status and potential worth in the market indirectly. They suffers from getting job oppotunities as it completely depends on people's jugdement.

In conclusion, I believe that upto certain extend photographers can be allowed to capture photographs for people who are intrested in famous people's live, However, they should not follow them everywhere and I completely agree with it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both perspectives and give a clear final view: photographers may take pictures to meet public interest, but should not follow celebrities everywhere. The discussion of publicity is relevant, especially the points about social-media attention, fashion influence and possible work opportunities. The opposing paragraph also explains how exposure to personal difficulties could affect a celebrity. However, some claims are not fully explained—for example, how photographs of leisure activities directly lead to employment—and the discussion focuses more on celebrities’ careers than on the public’s interest or their right to privacy. Develop these links with a specific example and make your position clearer before the conclusion as well as in it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The progression from possible benefits to privacy concerns is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the other side” and “In conclusion” help the reader identify the stages of the argument. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some stronger control through paragraphing and a logical sequence. To make the flow more natural, reduce formulaic transitions and connect individual claims more explicitly. For instance, explain how public interest leads to increased interaction, then how that interaction might benefit a celebrity, rather than presenting these points as a chain without enough explanation. The conclusion’s “However” also needs clearer punctuation and separation from the preceding clause.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “public exposure,” “potential employers,” “relationship issues” and “job opportunities,” so the main ideas can be communicated. There are also attempts at less common expressions, but several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make the language less precise. For example, “showoff their progress” is not a natural expression in this context, and “celebritiy status” and “intrested” contain spelling errors. “Photographers are hired … to track their daily activity” also gives an imprecise impression of the photographers’ role. Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully; this would make your vocabulary more effective without requiring unnecessarily complex words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning “because” and “as,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur often enough to limit accuracy. Examples include “hired to photographed,” “Photographers continues,” and “They suffers”; these should use consistent verb forms and agreement. In “People witness their efforts … and increases interaction,” the subject changes but the verb does not reflect that change clearly. The final sentence also joins contrasting ideas with a comma before “However,” creating a run-on structure. Practise checking each sentence for its subject and main verb, and use full stops or semicolons to separate complete clauses.

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