Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Taking photos is best way to make memories with the help of photograghed .Some people have interested to know about this whats going on their famous celebrities . On the other hand people do not have interest . In this essay i am writting both views and I will give my own opionion .

Followed famous person on the social media to know about their personal life

.Firstly people love them just curious what they are doing and where they go.

secondly some of them they are roll modle what they do they also want to do . For example if any actor or actress going to gym and eat healthy food they also want to do same thing .

On the other hand side people do not like who post there personal photos on social media. first and foremost some peple could not afford that much money so if there children see the celebrities are posting expensive dresses ,clothes eating in the resturants all the time then they are children alsowant the same things at the own home which is not possibly because they are parents are not that rich.

In conculsion both sides are having they are own rights but in my opinion we follow the famous people not there lifestyle .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You attempt to discuss both views and give an opinion, but the response addresses the task only minimally. The first view is linked to public curiosity and celebrities as role models, with the example of copying an actor’s gym and eating habits. However, the essay shifts from photographers following celebrities to celebrities posting on social media, so it does not clearly explain whether professional photography is justified or intrusive. The opposing view focuses mainly on the effect of expensive lifestyles on children, rather than privacy or the impact of being followed. Your final opinion, “we follow the famous people not there lifestyle,” is difficult to interpret and is not supported. The response is also 36 words below the required minimum. Develop both views directly around photographers’ actions and state a clear, reasoned position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall shape: an introduction, paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. The phrases “Firstly,” “secondly,” and “On the other hand” signal some relationships between ideas. However, progression is uneven: the opening moves from taking photos to social-media interest without establishing a clear link to photographers following famous people, and the second body paragraph shifts to family finances. Some sentences and fragments are difficult to connect, such as “Followed famous person on the social media to know about their personal life,” which appears separately from the introduction. The conclusion repeats the two-sided framing but does not clearly resolve it. Use a clear topic sentence for each view, connect each example to that view, and make references such as “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “personal life,” “curious,” “role model,” and “expensive dresses,” which helps convey the general subject. However, the range is basic and several choices or spellings make the meaning less clear, including “photograghed,” “roll modle,” and “resturants.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “people have interested” and “followed famous person.” The response sometimes uses “post” and “social media” where the task is specifically about professional photographers taking and publishing photographs, which weakens precision. Build a more accurate set of expressions for privacy, media attention, and public interest, and check spelling and collocations. For example, distinguish “photographing celebrities” from “following celebrities online.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including the example beginning “if any actor or actress…” and the sentence about children seeing celebrities’ posts. However, sentence forms are often incomplete or faulty, and the range remains limited. Examples include “Some people have interested to know,” “Firstly people love them just curious,” and “they are children alsowant the same things,” where sentence structure and verb forms make the relationships unclear. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “Taking photos is best way” and the run-on opening paragraph. These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, then combine them with accurate clauses using “because,” “although,” and “if”; proofread for sentence boundaries and basic agreement.

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