Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Celebreties are people too and that they need private and normal life sometimes,however they have to embrace the fact the path that they have chosen.Being photograped any where is part of there profession.

Being celebreties are being a public figure and they can not avoid that point.

Though they wanted personal and quiet life it seems impossible for them,Same as in photographer side vice versa,Getting photos for headlines is part of there job.Without interesting photots ther is no interesting headlines.Thre for they do not bread for living,This is how showusiness works.Artis and actors inteded to be bothered ny photographers and photographers intedded to bother artist,.

Therefor I conclude that ther is nothing wrong of an artist bieng photgraphed in public,as it is part of their life.They are famous and photgraphers made them famous.Without photoggrapher they will never be known to people.Photographer has euge impact in their lives that they should be thankful for intstead of being angry and irritated.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear opinion: you believe photographers are justified in photographing celebrities in public because it is part of their profession and helps make them famous. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the opposing argument—that constant photography can invade privacy or cause harm—is only briefly acknowledged in the opening. The reasons supporting your own view are also asserted rather than explained; for example, “Without photographer they will never be known to people” needs qualification and support. The response addresses the topic only minimally, and the required minimum length is not met: it is 91 words short. Develop each side with reasons and a relevant example, then explain your position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces privacy and the demands of celebrity, while the final paragraph states your conclusion. The reader can identify your main position, but the ideas do not progress clearly between these points. The sentence beginning “Though they wanted personal and quiet life” shifts quickly from celebrities to photographers without clearly signalling how the two arguments relate. Connectors such as “Though,” “Therefor,” and “Without” are attempted, but some are used inaccurately or do not establish a clear relationship. Separate the two views into distinct paragraphs, use a topic sentence for each, and make the conclusion follow from the reasons already explained.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “private,” “public figure,” “headlines,” “profession,” and “photographers,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the writing harder to read, such as “Celebreties,” “photograped,” “photots,” and “showusiness.” Some word combinations are also unnatural, including “they do not bread for living” and “euge impact in their lives.” Aim for accurate spelling and more precise expressions for privacy, media attention, and professional responsibilities. Learning these phrases in context will help you express your ideas more naturally and avoid relying on repeated words such as “photographer” and “famous.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, for example, “Though they wanted personal and quiet life it seems impossible for them,” and you use simple statements to express your position. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation are frequent enough to make parts difficult to follow. “Being celebreties are being a public figure” has an unclear structure, while “they have to embrace the fact the path that they have chosen” is missing a grammatical link between “fact” and “the path.” There are also run-on sentences and missing spaces after commas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a complete structure.

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