Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people believe it is normal to capture pictures of well-known person anytime because individual are interested to get information about their ideal's daily life. While, others argue that they should respect their perosnal space and privacy. I strongly agree with this statement as everyone has right to live as they wish and this eassy will represent both the view points in upcoming paragraphs.

On th one hand, the press and photographers captured the pictures of famous people to post it on thier social media pages such as instagram, facebook and twitter. By doing this, individual's get an update about specific person's lifestyle. As a result, media channels and press companies increase their target audience. For example, press companies assign specific employees to keep tracking on famous people lifestyle, which they use to get more reach and knowledgement.

On the other hand, it is unethical to click photos of celebrites without their concents, as it could affect their peronal life and privacy. Furthermore, many people prefer to keep their perosnal and professional life seprate because of safety concerns.For instance, many famous people keep their family members away from camers to keep themselves safe and secure.

In my opinion, everyone have right to spend thier life as they want. People should respect famous people life's privacy so they can also spend some time normally with their families and friends without getting unwanted attention. In addition, press companies should take their permission first before taking their photos to avoid unnecessary situation.

In concluion, it is understandble that people or media interested to know about celebrity's peronal choices but they should respect other people privacy and safety.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and make your position clear: you explain that public interest can benefit media companies, then argue that celebrities’ privacy and safety should be respected. The examples about media outlets tracking famous people and families being kept away from cameras are relevant. However, the first view is developed mainly from the media’s commercial perspective; explain more directly why members of the public value these photographs, and consider whether that interest can justify them. The privacy argument is clearer, but points such as safety and family life would benefit from more specific explanation. Your conclusion restates your opinion, though the suggestion that photographers ask permission could be linked more explicitly to the discussion of public interest.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. The progression is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In my opinion” help readers identify each stage. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical, with “As a result” and “Furthermore” doing much of the linking. The opening sentence also uses “While” awkwardly, and the relationship between the media’s commercial gain and the public’s interest could be made clearer. Use more precise referencing and develop links between each claim and its supporting example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “privacy,” “safety concerns,” “target audience,” and “unwanted attention,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “professional life” and “media channels.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “perosnal,” “celebrites,” “concents,” and “knowledgement” appear in the response. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “get an update about specific person’s lifestyle” and “keep tracking on famous people lifestyle.” Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. A more precise range—for example, language about public curiosity, press coverage, and intrusion—would help express the argument with greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “as,” and “so,” and most of the argument remains understandable. Some sentence forms are controlled, such as “many people prefer to keep their personal and professional life separate because of safety concerns.” However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction recur. For example, “everyone have right” needs “everyone has the right,” while “individual’s get” incorrectly uses an apostrophe and plural verb. “On th one hand” also begins an incomplete or awkward contrast structure, and “it is understandble that people or media interested” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. Review subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete clause structure, then proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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