Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is debtable topic that whether it is good or not to have photography of famous personality by professional photographers everwhere they go because the fans are curious about their lifestyle. I will discuss both points of view in the upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples as well as my own opinin about it.

Having pictures of famous people what they do in daily life as it is good because their fans are interested to know about it. Famous personalities play vital role in the public life as role model which inspire their fans to achieve their goals. while knowing about their struggles which they faced to become a famous personality with up and downs of life which also give postive example for the public. And giving them proper information that at achieve something in life that person has to faced both side of life to become strong and fanous personality.

On the side, this is aslo wrong to take the photos of every action of their life because famous people also having their personal life with their family as they also need privacy from social platforms to live a normal life. Personal space helps them to make proper balance between proffessional and private lifestyle to protect their mental peace. So, they can happily give their valuable time to their family and doing their own hobbies while balacing work life.

To conclude, it is good to have photos of famous people of their lifestyle but they aslo have personal life with their family which means they aslo need privacy from social platforms .

It is only good to have photography about their workplace rather private life to keep thitheir easyas they can balance work and private lifestyle in a good way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion and give a personal view: the first body paragraph explains why fans may value information about celebrities, while the next argues that public figures need privacy. Your conclusion also proposes limiting photography to their workplace. However, the position is not fully consistent: the introduction says you will discuss the issue, but does not state your view, and the conclusion first supports lifestyle photographs before restricting them to work settings. Several ideas remain general, such as celebrities being role models, and the response gives no specific example to show how photographs inform or harm the public. State your position clearly from the introduction and develop each side with a concrete example and explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This makes the overall arrangement coherent. Some linking is also attempted through phrases such as “On the side” and “To conclude.” However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from fans’ curiosity to role models and then to life struggles without clearly connecting these points. The conclusion repeats the privacy argument and contains a confusing final sentence. Use topic sentences that identify each paragraph’s main point, then explain it in a clear sequence. More precise referencing and fewer loosely connected clauses would make the cohesion less mechanical and easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “privacy,” “personal space,” “mental peace,” and “balance between professional and private lifestyle.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the issue beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response harder to read, such as “debatble,” “everwhere,” “famous personality,” and “proper information.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “photos of every action of their life.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Repeating “famous people,” “life,” and “personal” can also be reduced by using suitable alternatives such as “celebrities,” “private affairs,” and “public figures.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “because” and “while,” and you try to explain cause and effect. However, complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete, which sometimes makes the intended relationships unclear. For example, “Famous personalities play vital role … as role model which inspire their fans” has problems with articles, agreement, and clause structure. The fragment beginning “while knowing about their struggles” is not joined to a complete main clause, and “they also need privacy … to live” is not consistently controlled in the longer sentences. Work on building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses accurately. Review articles, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation.

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