Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This picture is showing 3 charts.Ellaborating population in US cities. Other 2 charts showing population of Manhattan and other districs.
On the first hand population of 1.New York city is 79,216 in 1800. secoundly [redacted phone] in 1900 thirdly [redacted phone] in 2000.This chart is showing person community between 1800 to 2000.
On the other hand other 2 charts explain percentage population and year.Manhattan population is 60515 in 1800 total percentage is 76.secoundly percentage is 54 and thirdly percentage is 19. This is comming low yearly.third chat is also showing is percentage of total population.In the third chart population has been increased by year between 1800 to 2000.
In my conclusion first chart is not showing any percentage and other two charts showing the population of their districts.Manhattan decreasing and other districs incresing their population between 1800to2000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the overall rise in New York City’s population and the contrasting direction of change in Manhattan and the other districts. Several figures are accurate, including the city totals and Manhattan’s 1800 population and percentage. However, the report is only partial: it does not give Manhattan’s 1900 or 2000 population, and it describes the other districts’ increase without reporting their figures or percentages. The statement that the charts concern “US cities” is also inaccurate; they show New York City and its districts. Your overview is present but brief and does not clearly compare the scale of the changes. The response is 15 words below the required minimum, and fuller coverage of the key data would make the summary more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic overall structure: it introduces the visuals, discusses the city total, then turns to the district data and ends with a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of progression. However, the organisation is weakened by mechanical sequencing such as “On the first hand,” “secoundly,” and “thirdly,” and by unclear references such as “third chat,” which makes it difficult to identify which table is being discussed. The conclusion repeats earlier points rather than bringing the main comparisons together. Group the information into clear paragraphs—citywide change, then Manhattan versus the other districts—and use precise references and linking phrases to show the comparisons.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “population,” “percentage,” “increased,” and “decreasing,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “person community,” “This picture is showing,” and “This is comming low yearly.” Repetition of “chart” and “population” also limits precision. Spelling errors, including “Ellaborating,” “secoundly,” “districs,” and “incresing,” further reduce clarity. Aim for standard data-reporting expressions and accurate forms, for example, “the table presents,” “accounted for,” and “declined.” This would make your descriptions more concise and appropriate to an academic summary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to connect ideas sometimes produce incomplete or awkward structures. For example, “Manhattan population is 60515 in 1800 total percentage is 76” joins two statements without a clear grammatical link, while “This is comming low yearly” does not form a clear sentence. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “This picture is showing 3 charts.Ellaborating population…” The repeated present-progressive form (“is showing”) is not well suited to describing table data. Use clear simple sentences with accurate past or present-tense reporting verbs, and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation. More controlled sentence patterns would improve readability.
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