Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

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The first table illustrate the changes of population ofb newyprk city fromm 1800 to 2000. The second and third tablr demostrate the changes in population of the five districts of the city,

Overall, the first table shows the changes in the total population of newyork city from 1800 to 2000. the second and third table illustrate the changes in the population of different districts like Manhattan, Brookly and Bronx etc over the same period

According to the information of first table th total population of the New York in 1800 was 79216 but in 1900 significantlyb changes in population ant it was reached on [redacted phone]. There for, in 2000 the population of New York was incread sharply and reached on [redacted phone].Mean while, the population of Manhattan the district of New York was on 60515 and the percenrage of population in 1800 of Manhattan was 76% then in 1900 the population changed and increased [redacted phone] and its percantage w

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and include several relevant figures, such as the city’s population rising from 79,216 in 1800 to 8,009,185 in 2000, and Manhattan’s 1800 population and share. However, the response is incomplete: it stops mid-sentence at “its percantage w” and does not report the later Manhattan trend or the growth of the other districts, which together reached 81% of the total by 2000. The overview mostly repeats what the tables show rather than selecting the key contrast: Manhattan’s share declined while the other districts became dominant. The response also falls two words short of the 150-word minimum; 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop a complete overview and compare the main changes across all periods.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and time markers such as “in 1800,” “in 1900” and “in 2000” help indicate sequence. However, the overview repeats the introduction instead of advancing the comparison, and the final paragraph ends abruptly, leaving the information without a clear conclusion or progression. Linking expressions such as “There for” and “Mean while” are attempted, but they do not consistently create clear relationships between ideas. The long opening sentences also contain several points without clear separation. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and key details, group related figures, and ensure each sentence leads logically to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “total population,” “districts,” “increased” and “percentage,” so the basic subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the text harder to read, for example “newyprk,” “demostrate,” “percantage” and “incread.” Some word combinations are also unnatural, such as “population was reached on” and “significantly changes in population.” Aim for accurate, standard forms and more precise reporting language, such as “rose to,” “increased substantially” and “accounted for.” Avoid repeating “changes” when describing different trends; verbs such as “grew,” “declined” and “represented” would make comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast with “but” and a sequence introduced by “then.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “the first table illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “in 1900 significantly changes in population ant it was reached” lacks a clear grammatical structure. The sentence beginning “then in 1900” also remains unfinished, so its clause cannot be understood fully. Articles and sentence boundaries are sometimes missing or unclear, and capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense. For example: “The population rose to 3,437,202 in 1900.”

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