Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The three tables illustrate the changes of population of five districts in New York City between 1800 and 2000. The first table demonstrates the total population of all five districts. The other two tables give detailed information of five districts, including Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island, over the same period.
Overall, the total population grow continuously from 1800 to 2000. Took the lion account in 1800, Manhattan was surpassed by the other districts in 2000.
Turning to 'Manhattan", it was the dominant group with the population of 60,515, accounted at 76 percent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
你的回答远低于150-word的最低要求，这严重影响了你全面完成任务的能力。虽然你确定了主题并尝试了概述，但回答在仅写了几句后就戛然而止。你未能报告表格中提供的大部分数据，例如Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens和Staten Island的趋势，也未完成题目要求的比较分析。为了改进，你必须确保涵盖任务的所有部分，包括对主要趋势的清晰总结以及对整个所给时间段内数据的具体比较。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
该回答篇幅过短，无法展示连贯的结构或有效的衔接手段。虽然尝试了引言和概述，但缺乏主体段落且结尾仓促，阻碍了逻辑思路的发展。衔接手段极少，且文本缺乏组织信息所需的必要分段。为了改进，请专注于构建你的报告，包括清晰的引言、明确的概述，以及至少两个逻辑分组数据的正文段落。
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
所用词汇基础且有限。在词汇选择和搭配上存在错误，例如 'grow continuously'（应为 'grew continuously'）和 'Took the lion account'（这是一个错误的习语）。词汇范围不足以展示更高IELTS band scores所需的灵活性。为了改进，请专注于使用更精确的术语来描述趋势，例如 'fluctuated'、'remained stable' 或 'experienced a significant increase'，并确保在语境中正确使用习语。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
回答中包含多处语法错误，包括时态不一致（用 'grow' 代替 'grew'）和表达笨拙（用 'accounted at 76 percent' 代替 'accounted for 76 percent'）。句式结构非常单一，大多是简单句。缺乏获得更高band score所需的复杂句式。为了改进，请练习使用多种句型，包括带有从句的复合句，并在描述历史数据时更加注意动词时态。
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