Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The following tables demonstrate the different ratio of population in New York city and compare percentages in subsequent five districts of the city from 1800 to 2000.
Overall, It is cleared that New York city is most populated in 2000 in all districts of the city. Moreover,It has least population in different part of the city in 1800.
The total population of New York city is seen as 79,216 in 1800 and lage inreased in 2000 which is about 8,009,185.
In 1800, it can be seen that Manhattan district has the largest percentage of the total population as compared to other four distric like Brooklyn,Bronx,Queen,Staten lsland.Manhattan has about 76% of the total population and other districts have 24% respectively. Additionally,these ratio of percentages remain same for 1900 as 54% for Manhattan and 46% for other districts. However, this ratio is rapidly increased in 2000 for other districts Brooklyn,Bronx,Queens and Staten Island about 81% and decreased for Manhattan of about 19%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses the task by summarizing the population data for New York City and its districts. You have identified the main trends, such as the overall growth and the shift in population distribution from Manhattan to the other districts. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, you mention the 1800 and 2000 figures but miss the opportunity to highlight the significant growth in the 1900s or the specific trends within the individual districts. The data interpretation is generally accurate, but more detailed comparisons between the districts would have strengthened the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'Moreover', and 'However'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'these ratio of percentages remain same'. The transition between the general population data and the district-specific data could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'lage inreased' (which contains a spelling error) and 'different ratio'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'ratio of population' when referring to percentages or total numbers. To improve, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'significant surge', 'proportion', or 'dramatic shift', rather than relying on repetitive or slightly imprecise phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'It is cleared that', 'It has least population', and 'these ratio of percentages remain same'. There are also issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.
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