Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of the reasons why some people to choose to leave the U.K., while others choose to stay in Great Britain.
Overall, it is evident that quality of life is the significant reason for leaving the U.K. In contrast, people who want to stay in the U.K. because of their family and friends, it accounts for the highest proportion.
Looking at the chart in more detail, quality of life is the most common reason for leaving the U.K., accounting for 37%. Financial reasons ranked second at almost 24%, closely followed by employment, around 18%. Moreover, 12% for weather, and family and friends is the least common reason for leaving the U.K. at about just 9% only.
In contrast, people who choose to stay in Great Britain, family and friends records the highest figure at approximately 43%. The proportion of social life has ranked second at approx. 21%. Similarly, both financial and employment represents 15% and 15%, respectively, whereas the percentage of language records only 11%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a summary of population changes in New York City across three tables (1800–2000), but the student has written a report about reasons for leaving or staying in the U.K. based on pie charts that were not provided. Because the student failed to address the actual task requirements and data provided, the task achievement score is severely impacted. While the student does report on the data they chose to include, it is irrelevant to the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
Despite the content being irrelevant to the prompt, the essay itself is structured logically. It uses an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Looking at the chart in more detail', and 'Similarly' are used effectively to guide the reader through the information. Paragraphing is appropriate, and there is a clear progression of ideas within the context of the (incorrect) data being described.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
The vocabulary is generally appropriate for a data-description task. The student uses terms like 'proportion', 'significant reason', 'account for', and 'records the highest figure' correctly. There is a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the intended meaning, although the content is entirely unrelated to the provided prompt. There are no significant spelling errors, and the word choice is consistent with the style required for IELTS Academic Task 1.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
The student demonstrates a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some minor grammatical slips, such as 'the percentage of the reasons why some people to choose to leave' (should be 'choose') and 'people who want to stay... it accounts for' (a redundant subject). However, these errors do not impede communication. The control of punctuation and sentence structure is generally solid, showing a level of competence that would be sufficient for a higher band if the content were relevant.
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