Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The three tables illustrate the population changes in New York and its five districts city over a period of two centuries.
Overall, the population of New York city increased drastically over this period. Even though the population of Manhatten district increased, its overall percentage of total population decreased massively, while other districts increased.
In 1800, the population of New York is 79,216 and more than 75% of its from Manhattan, only 24% are from other districts. And by 1900, the population of New York increased sharply from 79 thousand to over 3.4 million. Even in 1900 the most populated district is Manhattan with over 50% of total population which is 1.85 million, even though its percentage of total population decreased. the other five districts share increased sharply from 24% in 1800 to 46% in 1900.
By the year 2000, New York population has risen to a new record of over 8 million. In contrast to previosu trends Manhattan population saw a slioght decline from 1.5 million in 1900 to 1.53 million. and its total share of population is decreased massively form 54% to 19% in 2000. While the other five districts increased massively to 6.4 million in 2000 and its share increaseed to 81%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all parts of the task, including the total population and the specific district trends. You successfully identified the main features, such as the overall growth and the shifting dominance from Manhattan to the other districts. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, you stated Manhattan's population saw a 'slight decline' from 1.5 million to 1.53 million, which is actually an increase. Additionally, the prompt refers to five districts, but your text occasionally refers to them as 'the other five districts' (implying six total). Despite these minor data errors, the overall summary is clear and provides a good overview of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from the general trend to specific time periods. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast to previous trends' and 'Overall', which help the flow. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally confusing, such as the mention of 'the other five districts' when there are only four districts outside of Manhattan. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different time periods.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'drastically', 'sharply', and 'record'. There are some spelling errors, such as 'Manhatten' (Manhattan), 'previosu' (previous), 'slioght' (slight), and 'increaseed' (increased). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and ensure consistent spelling of proper nouns and key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the population of New York is 79,216' (should be past tense 'was'), 'more than 75% of its from Manhattan' (missing 'population' or 'people'), and 'its total share of population is decreased' (incorrect passive voice). While these errors occur frequently, the meaning remains clear throughout the text. Improving your control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement will significantly enhance your score.
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