Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The first table illustrates the overall population of New York City (all five districts) over 1800 to 2000. The other table represents the change in the population in Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and State islands from 1800 to 2000.
Overall, it can be seen that the population of New york City and other four districts increased by passing the year. While, only in Manhattan population and its percentage decreased.
The population of New York City experienced a significant growth from 1800 to 2000, 79,216 to 8,009,185. In other districts(Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and state island) also follow the same trend. Similarly, the growth of individuals rose dramatically 1800 to 2000, thus, population rate 18,701 to 6,471,089, as well as, percentage of total population also
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have identified the main trend of population growth, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. You have not provided a comprehensive comparison of the data across all districts, and the lack of a conclusion or sufficient detail means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you cover all data points provided in the tables and provide a full analysis that reaches the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall' and 'While' are used, but the connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical. The final sentence is unfinished, which breaks the flow of the response. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect your observations logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'increased by passing the year' are unnatural and imprecise. You have attempted to use some data-related vocabulary, but the range is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'experienced a substantial surge' or 'witnessed a steady decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains several grammatical errors, such as 'State islands' (should be Staten Island) and 'New york City' (capitalization error). There are also issues with sentence structure, particularly in the final paragraph where the sentence is left incomplete. While you have attempted some complex structures, the frequent errors and the lack of completion in the final sentence affect the overall clarity. Focus on proofreading for basic errors and ensuring that every sentence is grammatically complete.
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