Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the given tables the information shows that changes in the population of new York, manhattan, brooklyn, bronx, queens and staten island from the period of 1800 to 2000

In the year 1800 hundred the new York population is 76,216 in that manhattan contains more number of people with 60,515 which covers 76% population and brooklyn, bronx , queens and staten island all together contains 24% population which is 187,01. With in a century there is a lot of changes in population; In the year 1900 new york total population is 3,437,202 here also highest stake contain by manhattan districts with 54% which is 1,850,093 of total population and remaining 4 districts (Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) contains 46%of population 1,587,109.

now in 21st century every thing changed in population and preferences of city by public; in this century total population of new york is 8,009,185 here comes the big change compared to previous century’s manhattan contains 19% population which is [redacted phone] there is drop from previous century and all other district contains 81% population with 6,471,089

from century to century there is a rise of population in new york and change in priority of choosing district to stay by the public

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the data, identifying the total population growth and the shift in distribution between Manhattan and the other districts. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the calculation for the 'remaining 4 districts' in 1800 is inaccurate based on the provided data, and the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. While the key data points are mentioned, the lack of precise comparison and the inclusion of minor calculation errors limit the depth of the response. To improve, ensure that data is reported accurately and that a clear, concise overview of the main trends is provided in the introduction or conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the chronological progression. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical. Transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the lack of linking words makes the flow feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the 1900 data and the 21st-century data is abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to connect ideas more fluidly and improve the logical progression of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There is frequent repetition of basic terms like 'population', 'contains', and 'districts'. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'highest stake contain by manhattan' and 'preferences of city by public'. The range is sufficient to convey the basic information, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility or sophisticated control required for a higher score. Focusing on using more varied synonyms and precise collocations will help elevate the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in new York'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'is 76,216' instead of 'was'), and run-on sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalisation of proper nouns. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve accuracy.

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