Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given tables compare the population of the new yourk city and five districts of the city from 1800 to 2000.
Overall, population of the new york city saw a major improvement in 1900 as compare to 1800 whereas 80% of the population started living in the other districts then manhatten, which is far laginy behind in 1800.
In the begining population of newyork city was slightly lower than 80,000 in 1800 but 76% of the population was living in manhatten after a centuary there was a improvement in the population whereas it decline the percentage of manhatten 54% additionally only 19% of the pop. Population was living these by the end of 2000.
In contrast only 24% of the population was living in the other districts then manhatten with the inter boom in the population in new york city by the numbers climbs upto 46%. whereas
the number saw significant increc was escalated to 81 % which illustrat 81 % of the population was started living in the other districts than manhattan by the end of 2000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main trends in population growth and the shift in distribution between Manhattan and the other districts. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For example, the claim that 80% of the population lived in other districts in 1900 is not supported by the provided tables. Furthermore, the description of the percentage decline in Manhattan is confusingly phrased. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the unclear presentation of the figures prevent a higher score. The response would benefit from a more careful verification of the data points before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as the awkward transition 'whereas' at the end of the final paragraph. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the 'other districts'. The progression of information is not always logical, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the years and the districts. Improved use of linking words and clearer sentence structure would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'new yourk', 'manhatten', 'laginy', and 'increc'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. Phrases like 'major improvement' are not ideal for describing population growth, and the use of 'pop. Population' is redundant and informal. To improve, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to trends and data, such as 'significant increase', 'proportion', or 'demographic shift', and ensure correct spelling throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'population... saw' and 'percentage... decline'. Sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on, particularly in the final paragraph. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalisation of proper nouns like 'New York' and 'Manhattan'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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