Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The first table gives information about how to change in the total liveing of people in New York between 1800 to 2000. and others charts tables illustreta changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens., Staten, Island) during the same period.
Overall, it is clear that there are several differences among the three tables. The first table The highest figures were recorded in 2000 , while 1800 had the lowest values. Some categories increased, whereas others decreased.
According to the first table in 2000was the highest at 8,009,185, . In the second table, a similar trend can be seen in almost 1900. However other districts showed a different pattern.
In the third table in 2000 remained the largest population at 6,471,089, while in 1800 was the lowest population. Compared with the other two tables, some figures increased, whereas others fell. Overall, the three tables show both similarities and differences.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately address the task. While it mentions the tables, it does not provide a clear summary of the main features or trends. The data provided is fragmented and often inaccurate, such as the claim that '2000 was the highest at 8,009,185' without context, or the incomplete sentence at the end. The response lacks a meaningful analysis of the population changes across the five districts, failing to compare the growth or decline of specific areas over the two-century period. The information is presented in a way that is difficult to follow and does not fulfill the requirement to report main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disjointed and often incomplete. Cohesive devices are used ineffectively or are absent, making the text feel like a collection of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive report. For example, the transition 'Moreover second and third table compar in' is grammatically broken and fails to link ideas. The referencing is unclear, and the overall structure does not guide the reader through the data in a logical manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'liveing' instead of 'living', 'illustreta' instead of 'illustrate', and 'othre' instead of 'other'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data trends accurately; for instance, the writer uses 'highest figures' and 'lowest values' repeatedly without employing more precise academic terminology like 'peaked', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. The errors in basic vocabulary and the inability to use appropriate terminology for data description significantly hinder communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede understanding. There are many sentence fragments, such as 'The first table The highest figures were recorded in 2000' and 'Moreover second and third table compar in The highest percentage in 76% while othre'. Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced commas and periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of basic errors in subject-verb agreement and word order makes the text difficult to read.
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