Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the given table the total population of New York City had changed from 1800 to 2000. The was five districts of the city like: Manhattan, Brooklyn,Bronx,Queen,Staten island.
Overall it can be seen that, the New York City had prolieftring although the ratio was also rising.vis-a-vis the Manhattan the percentage of total population had hiking since the year 1800.
To begin with,so as to all the five districts the Manhattan in the year 1800 the population was came till 65,515 and the highest population in the New York City since 2000 around near by 15 lakh. However the higher ratio was 76 percentage
On the other hand,The other districts all the year 1800 the population had around near by 19000 . suddenly in the year 1900 the population of the New York City was mashrooming tell 16 lakhs.Therefore the year 2000 the individual was rising around 64 lakhs.so compared to all the year the highest ratio was In Manhattan 76 percentage and the other all the districts the 81 percentage in the year 2000 was incredible in the New York City.and individuals was incredible day by day in the New York City.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the information presented is often confusing or factually incorrect based on the provided tables (e.g., the mention of '15 lakh' or '64 lakhs' is not clearly derived from the data). The overview is vague and lacks a clear comparison of the trends across the different districts. The response struggles to select key information, leading to a disjointed report that does not fully satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often inaccurate or inappropriate, such as 'vis-a-vis' and 'suddenly', which do not fit the context of a data report. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the years and the districts. The lack of clear structure within the paragraphs further hinders the flow of information, resulting in a response that is difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'prolieftring' (proliferating), 'hiking' (hiked), 'mashrooming' (mushrooming), and 'tell' (till). The use of 'lakh' is not appropriate for an international IELTS context unless specified. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data accurately, and the errors frequently impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The was five districts'), tense usage (e.g., 'population was came'), and sentence structure. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. The majority of sentences contain errors, which significantly impacts the readability of the text.
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