Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
in these given paragraphs the population has extended to a great extend the given pie chart is of new york the first graph slow the total population of new york while the second and third paragraphs shows the population of five main districts of the city which include manhattan, brox, brooklyn, queen, ststic island over the same period.in the first paragraph changes in the total population of new york is mentioned from 1800 to 2000
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 75 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The student provides a brief introduction but fails to present any data, trends, or comparisons from the provided tables. There is no attempt to summarise the main features or highlight significant changes in population over the 200-year period. To improve, the student must provide a clear overview of the data and support it with specific figures from the tables.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response consists of a single, run-on paragraph with poor punctuation and capitalization. There is a lack of logical progression, as the text stops abruptly before presenting any actual information. Cohesive devices are absent, making the text difficult to follow. To improve, the student should use clear paragraphing—separating the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs—and employ linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'given paragraphs' (incorrectly identifying the tables as paragraphs) and 'extended to a great extend'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'brox' for Bronx, 'queen' for Queens, and 'ststic' for Staten Island. The range is insufficient to convey the information accurately. To improve, the student should learn topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a significant increase', and 'demographic trends'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with capitalization (e.g., 'new york'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. The text is essentially a series of poorly connected clauses rather than complete, grammatically sound sentences. Punctuation is largely ignored, which hinders readability. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and correctly applying capitalization rules for proper nouns.
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