Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The rendered tabular representation depict the information regarding the population of new york city in 1800 and 2000
In an overview, it is evident that the maximum no of individuals popultion in new york city and manthattan.
Turning into details, In 1800 year the population of individuals in new york is 79,216.however, it increased upto after 1 decade is 3,437,202.therefore,after 10 year population of new tork city gain upto 9,009,185.whereas,in manhattan the percentage of total population is 76%in 1800year.
Shifting towards the reaming statement,after 20 year percentage of total population was decreased upto 19%.futhermore, in the other districts percentage of total population is 24% into 1800 year.afterthat,it will be inclinded the population of other districts is 46% after 10 year.
In lastly, the population of other district is 81% in 2000 year. Respectively
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the student attempts to report on the data, the information provided is inaccurate and confusing. For instance, the claim that the population increased to over 3 million after one decade (from 1800 to 1810) is factually incorrect based on the provided tables. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the data selection is disjointed, failing to effectively compare the growth of Manhattan against the other districts. The response is too brief to adequately cover the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between sentences are mechanical and often illogical, such as the use of 'Turning into details' followed by inaccurate data. The referencing is unclear, and the lack of cohesive devices makes the text difficult to follow. The final paragraph is particularly disjointed, with the phrase 'In lastly' being grammatically incorrect and failing to provide a coherent conclusion to the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'popultion', 'manthattan', 'reaming', and 'inclinded'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data trends, relying on basic phrasing that does not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. The misuse of terms like 'rendered tabular representation' suggests an attempt at academic tone that is not supported by the actual language control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'it will be inclinded'), and poor sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. The complexity of the structures is very low, and the errors are pervasive throughout the text, making it difficult to identify any consistent control over basic grammatical rules.
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