Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table chart shows the information about United State City New York year base information of the population between 1800 and 2000. which is counted another 5 cities of New York where people live far from the urban area.
To begin with , In 1800 year, USA city counted the 79,216 people all around Manhattan,Brooklyn,Bronx, Queens,Ataten Island over the equal year.
As well as , the maximum number of individual who are founded in giving majority change in people growth. In editions, all over approximately 8,009,185. Moreover , middle year like 1900 provide information of population. furthermore, 3,[redacted phone] around people in all over USA capital under five cities which also do same population statistics.
Overall, It is clear information in the table whic that, ancient time generation growth is low but upcoming modern year population is grow like rocket which gave major change.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately summarise the data provided. While it mentions the time frame and the city, it fails to report the main features or make meaningful comparisons between the districts. The data presented is inaccurate and confusing, such as the claim that 3,437,202 people lived in the 'USA capital'. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. The overview is vague and lacks a clear summary of the trends shown in the tables.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or in a mechanical, unnatural way, such as 'In editions' and 'As well as'. The referencing is unclear, and the connection between the sentences is weak, making it difficult for the reader to understand the relationship between the data points provided in the tables.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'year base information', 'founded in', and 'grow like rocket'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends, relying on repetitive and inaccurate phrasing. Spelling errors, such as 'Ataten Island' and 'whic that', further detract from the clarity of the response. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and article usage throughout the text. For example, 'the maximum number of individual who are founded in giving majority change' is grammatically incoherent. The use of punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and incorrect comma usage. The student relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently marred by errors, making the meaning difficult to discern.
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