Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the table illustrates the flactuation of new york city total population in the years of 1800 to 2000. further, vary in population of districts of different cities are demonstrated in second and third tables.
overall, in all five districts there is higher rise in population is seen in 2000 and 1900 comprises of [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] respectiviley. camparitively in 1800 the porportion of population is very low equivalent to 79216.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 71 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The overview is underdeveloped, and the response stops abruptly after only a few sentences, failing to provide a detailed summary or meaningful comparisons of the data across the five districts. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear overview and specific data points for each category, while meeting the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and an overview, the text ends prematurely, leaving the structure incomplete. Cohesive devices such as 'further' and 'moreover' are used, but they are not sufficient to create a coherent flow given the lack of content. To improve, you should structure your response with a clear introduction, a distinct overview paragraph, and body paragraphs that group data logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors, such as 'flactuation' (spelling) and 'camparitively' (spelling). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. Phrases like 'higher rise' are repetitive and lack precision. To improve, focus on using accurate terminology for describing trends, such as 'significant increase' or 'dramatic growth', and ensure you proofread for basic spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including 'the table illustrates the flactuation of new york city total population' (missing articles and incorrect preposition usage) and '1900 comprises of' (incorrect verb usage). Sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity needed for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters for proper nouns like 'New York City'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct use of articles, and varying your sentence structures.
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