Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The tables illustrate the number of populars were changed in New York side districts Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island over the year of [redacted phone]. Overall the highest proportion of population is in last years and lowest is starting time period.
The population of New York City were changed after the 1st decade. In the year of 1800 the population was less about 79,216 people lives in New York all five districts after the 100 years when signed the 1900 the population of 5 district was triple then 1800 was 3,437,202. In the last year 2000 the population was more had double from 1900 was 8,009,185. They people crossed almost more than 4,000,000 in the 100 year.
However the both below the graph represent the the population of Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens it was 60,515 in the starting time it get triple in 10 decades it reaches to 1,850,043 almost half of percentage of total population 54%. At the end time period the Manhattan population become in 2001 was 1,538,096 it get reduced by 30k almost 19% of population to tal population. In the other district Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island the 18,701 population in starting time period was 24%. In 1900 it get same of Manhattan in 2000 was 1,587,108 the proportion was 46%. In last the people of five rates was 6,471,089 almost 3/4 of percentage population was indulge was 81%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the data provided, but the presentation is confusing and lacks clarity. While you identify the overall upward trend, the specific data points are often inaccurate or poorly interpreted (e.g., stating the population was 'less about 79,216' in 1800). The comparison between the total population and the individual districts is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, focus on selecting the most significant data points—such as the start, end, and major turning points—rather than listing every figure, and ensure your descriptions of the data are mathematically accurate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the total population and the district-specific data is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in the year of' or 'in starting time period'. The referencing is also unclear; for example, it is difficult to determine which specific districts are being grouped together in the final paragraph. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and often inaccurate. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'number of populars were changed' and 'the people of five rates was'. You rely heavily on basic descriptors and struggle with collocations related to data reporting. While you attempt to use some numerical data, the surrounding language lacks the precision required for an Academic Task 1 response. To reach a higher band, focus on learning specific vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', and 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is frequently problematic, which often impedes communication. There are consistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('the population... were changed'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary articles and prepositions, such as 'in the last year 2000 the population was more had double'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often grammatically incorrect. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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