Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate the changes in population of New York City, Manhattan and other five districts from [redacted phone]
In 1800, the population of New York City ( all five districts) was 79,216 which rose to 3,437,202 in 1900. In 2000, the population surge and was 8,009,185 in New York City.
The population in Manhattan was 60,525 in 1800 which was 76% of total population. In 1900, the population was 1,850,093 which was 54% of total population. In 2000, the population experienced a slight decline with 1,538,096 which was 19% of total population. The population in other five districts was 18,701 in 1800, which counts 24% of total population. In 1900, the population increased significantly to 1,587,109 which was 46% of total population. In 2000, the population surge and reached 6,471,089 which was 81% of total population.
Overall, the the population of New York City was recorded highest among all cities throughout the period. In 2000, Manhattan has lowest population among all cities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student has provided a clear summary of the population changes in New York City and its districts between 1800 and 2000. However, some important details are missing, such as the population figures for the other districts, and comparisons could be clearer and more coherent. The overall context of the city’s growth and how each district contributed to the total population should be emphasized more. Overall, the response fulfills the task requirements but could better illustrate the data. Score: 6
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The coherence and cohesion of the response are moderate, with a logical structure that introduces the main topic effectively. However, transitional phrases are lacking, making it harder to follow the comparisons between the different periods and areas. For example, using phrases like "In contrast" or "Furthermore" could improve the flow of information. Paragraphing could be more distinct to separate ideas more clearly. Score: 6
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The lexical resource used is adequate but somewhat limited. Words like "surge" or "experienced a slight decline" demonstrate some variety; however, terms like "highest among all cities" lack accuracy—specifying the cities could have added clarity. The use of percentages is good, but the repetition of "total population" instead of using synonyms is noticeable. Expanding the vocabulary would enhance the response. Score: 6
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammatical range is decent, with a mix of simple and complex sentences. However, there are some noticeable errors: "The the population of New York City" (typo), and incorrect constructions such as "the population surge and was 8,009,185" should be corrected to "surged to 8,009,185." A few sentences lack clarity due to awkward phrasing. Improving grammar and varying sentence structures could enhance overall quality. Score: 6
Overall feedback
You have summarized key population trends in New York City effectively, presenting significant data. However, some aspects need improvement to reach a higher band. First, ensure to cover all districts comprehensively and include all relevant figures for better comparisons. Using more varied vocabulary and transition phrases will enhance the flow, helping readers follow your points. Focusing on clear grammar and sentence structures will also aid clarity and coherence. Continuing to practice will help you refine these skills further before your exam.
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