Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart demonstrates units of electricity produced by fuel source across two countries, Australia and France in the years eight nineteen eighty and two thousand.
Overall, it can be observed that France uses comparatively dramatic amount of fuel source for electricity than Australia. As per the year nineteen eighty and two thousand, Australia tried to minimize the usage. In contrast, France tended to use the fuel substantially over the years.
In Australia, in the years nineteen eighty and two thousand, the use of coal as per the fuel source was about fifty units, which significantly surged to one thirty units. While hydropower was used twenty units increasing gently to thirty six units. On the contrary, a significant decline in usage of oil and natural gas can be observed ranging from ten units to two units and twenty units to two units respectively. The total production by nineteen eighty was about hundred units. However, by two thousand it was about one seventy units.
France in the years nineteen eighty and two thousand the total production of units of electricity by fuel source was ninety units and one eighty units. The nuclear power generated fifteen units by nineteen eighty and by two thousand. About one twenty six units was generated becoming a sharply becoming sharply a vast majority. Whereas, coal remained constant over the years generating the same of twenty five units. and contrast, hydropower and natural gas experienced a great decline in usage. Hydropower was generated five units to two units while natural gas was generated twenty five units to decrease upto two units. Oil, on the other hand, had generated roughly the same as twenty units to slightly increase of twenty five units respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The task required a summary of population changes in New York City and its five districts based on the provided tables. Instead, the student wrote a report about electricity production in Australia and France. Consequently, the response fails to address any part of the actual task prompt. While the student provides a summary of the data they chose to write about, this does not satisfy the requirements of the prompt provided. As the response is entirely irrelevant to the data presented, it cannot be assessed for task achievement regarding the intended topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'While', and 'On the contrary'. However, the logical progression is undermined by the fact that the content is entirely unrelated to the prompt. The referencing is clear within the context of the student's chosen (but incorrect) topic, but the overall structure does not serve the purpose of the actual task.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'significantly surged', 'declining', 'remained constant', and 'vast majority'. There are some awkward phrasings like 'becoming sharply a vast majority', but the vocabulary is generally adequate for a data-reporting task. However, because the vocabulary is applied to an irrelevant topic, it does not demonstrate the ability to describe the specific data provided in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'France uses comparatively dramatic amount' (missing article), 'as per the year' (inappropriate preposition), and 'generating the same of twenty five units'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with sentence fragments and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score.
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