Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the table we saw 1800 year to 2000 years how peoples lives in new York city. Their are five districts of new York city . In 1800 year 60,515 peoples how lives in Manhattan .His total population Percentage is 76% . And other 24% peoples lives in others 4 districts . Other 24% peoples how lives in other four districts his peoples amount is 18,701. In 1900 years total amount of peoples how lives in New York City 3,437,202.In 1900 years how peoples live in Manhattan his amount is 1,850,093 and his total population percentage is 54%. And others 4 districts peoples amount is 1,538,096 his peoples total percentage is 46% . In 2000 years how peoples lives in New York City his total amount of 5 districts is 8,009,185. In 2000 years peoples how lives in Manhattan his amount is 1,538,096 and his percentage is 19% . And others four districts amount is 6,471,089 and his total percentage is 81%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by reporting data from the tables; however, it fails to provide a clear overview or identify the main trends. The information is presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive summary. There is a lack of comparison between the districts, and the data is presented in a repetitive, mechanical way. Furthermore, the response contains significant factual errors in the reporting of the data (e.g., the 2000 population for Manhattan is stated as 1,538,096, which contradicts the provided table). The response lacks the analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1 report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. Ideas are presented in a disjointed manner, with sentences simply listing figures one after another. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the referencing is often unclear (e.g., the repetitive use of 'his' to refer to population figures or districts). The overall structure is very basic and does not facilitate a smooth reading experience. The lack of an introduction or a concluding summary further hinders the coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic terms like 'peoples', 'amount', and 'lives'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data, such as 'increased', 'decreased', 'proportion', or 'significant'. The misuse of pronouns (using 'his' to refer to inanimate objects like districts or population counts) indicates a lack of control over basic lexical choices. The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('peoples lives', 'peoples amount is'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence structures. The use of 'his' to refer to non-human entities is a persistent error. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures; the writing is limited to simple, often fragmented, sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before periods and commas.

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