Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given chart shows total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. In this city many infrastructure change districts of Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx , Queens , Staten Island over the time period
Overview, Highly Papulation Manhattan overall all other district more than people lives in 76% 1800 and other district 24%. In 2000 rise other district population 81% and Manhattan 19 fall in papulation.
Firstly, Overall, Population in 1800 years 79,216, 3,437,202 in 1900 and 2000 8,009,185 in 2000 years. Manhattan in 1800 60,515 of population 76% highly more than other districts 18,701 population 24%. After a Centuary letter in 1900 years similar between population in Manhattan 1,850,093 population 54% and other districts 1,587,109 population 46%.
In that Para graph talk about 2000 years Manhattan population are fall to 1,538,096 totals 19%, on the other side other districts 2000 years rising population gonna 6,471,089 more highly increase 81%. Mostly Bronx , Queens , Staten Island, Brooklyn less increase where as, Manhattan district.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the population trends in New York City and its districts. However, the information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the analysis of the data is often inaccurate or confusing. For instance, the claim that 'Manhattan 19 fall in papulation' is unclear, and the comparison between Manhattan and the 'other districts' is poorly structured. While the main features are identified, the lack of clarity in reporting the figures and the failure to provide a coherent overview of the trends across the two centuries mean that the task is only partially addressed. The response lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as 'After a Centuary letter' and 'In that Para graph talk about'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the districts. The structure is mechanical, and the lack of effective linking words between sentences and paragraphs hinders the flow of information. To improve, focus on using transition signals to connect ideas more logically and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Papulation' instead of 'population', 'Centuary' instead of 'century', and 'gonna' which is too informal for an academic task. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. Phrases like 'more highly increase' are awkward and do not accurately describe the statistical trends. To achieve a higher score, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends, such as 'significant growth', 'declined', or 'proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people lives'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty or ungrammatical, such as 'Mostly Bronx , Queens , Staten Island, Brooklyn less increase where as, Manhattan district.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verbs agree with their subjects and are used in the correct tense.
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