Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in this table show the population of five states of cities is over the same but the other side discriebe that new york canverte the population up to 1800 to 2000

to begin with , the population of new york city in 2000 is[ [redacted phone]] as compares to in year 1800 [79216] . on the other hand , in year 1900 the new york town population is [3,437,202] dispite of all five districts

However, in manhattan 54% of complete populatin in year 1900 is [1,850,093] and in 2000 as the percentile of 19% of total populatin is [1,538,096] . therefore , in other disticts 81% of population shows in year 2000 with 6,471,089 numbers as well as in era 1900 , the percentage of total population is 46% with 1,587,109 popultion and in year , 1800 popultion is 18701 with thw percentile of 24% as compare to other districts .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing population data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the selection of data is somewhat arbitrary, missing key comparisons between the districts over the two-century period. The description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the reference to 'five states of cities' instead of districts. The response lacks a coherent summary of the main features, which is a requirement for Task 1. Consequently, the response does not fully address the requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'on the other hand' and 'therefore,' which do not logically connect the preceding and following information. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the districts and the total population. The overall structure is disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between the data points hinders the flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'discribe' (describe), 'canverte' (converted/changed), 'era' (used incorrectly for time periods), and 'percentile' (used incorrectly for percentage). The repetition of basic terms and the inability to use precise language to describe statistical changes significantly limit the range of vocabulary. The spelling errors are frequent and sometimes impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect preposition usage, and faulty sentence structures. For example, 'in this table show' is grammatically incorrect, and 'as compares to in year' is awkward. The use of punctuation is inconsistent, and the sentence construction is often simplistic or fragmented. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are consistently inaccurate, leading to a lack of clarity throughout the text.

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